I have a few tips for you from reading your essay. In my experience, having a range of different type of sentences makes a better essay. There are simple sentences, and then there are complex sentences. In my opinion, throwing in a variety of different sentence structures makes an essay flow better because there are less "stops" where the periods are. For example in your first paragraph, you say
In ancient time, men were considered to be more superior than women. This was because they were the sole provider or breadwinner.
You can meld these two sentences together to convey your two points into a single sentence, thus "In ancient times, men were considered to be superior to women due to the fact that they were the solve provider or breadwinner."
Also you have some parts that sound slightly awkward, for example as quoted about "more superior". I think just saying superior would suffice. Check up on your grammar, for example using consistent past tense/present tense. Be sure to proofread your essays!
There are lady bosses, female professors, female doctors and female engineers.
This sentence also came off a bit awkward for me. "lady bosses" sounds informal. Also you want to be consistent when using lists in sentences. You use female for the other three professions but not for bosses. To make the sentence less awkward, maybe try saying just "female professors, doctors, and engineers".
This is just the advice I have for you so far, go back, reread and don't be afraid to edit! :)