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Geneva convention between the texts and real application



3robi_in_Paris 2 / 4  
Dec 27, 2011   #1
2011 was the year of what we call "the Arabic spring" , we have seen those boy and girls who aspire to freedom, dignity and the right to live as humans , some of them facing army , polices , and all Agents of the dictatorial regime , in tunisia , egypt , syria , morroco ...

Some of those people has been captured and held in prisons, and treated like criminiels under all kinds of torture , but the funniest part (or saddest , it's depends on your vision ) that is some of those regimes was the first signatory of Geneva convention that prohibited the human torture even when it's comes to military information .

The most striking examples of those country that comes to my mind is morocco , always known as a touristic destination ,an amazing place to spend your holidays , with it's magic folklore and the secrets of the beauty of its landscape, this country seems to have other kind of secrets , prisons of human torture :

We can find that kind of prisons in several places in morroco , but the most strangest place that no can imagine is around the royal palace of the king , in rabat the capital of morroco , there is a prison called "tamara" , were information is extracted with certain ways that are sometimes extreme , sexual abuse , strikes , beatings ...

I love that country and I hope one a day , the king that that everybody trust , can see the truth of his own eyes and not through reports.

I am beginner in English , and hope you can help me to improve this article for my essay classe .

Thank you .

m45over 6 / 12  
Dec 27, 2011   #2
"criminiels" should be "criminals".Its depends on your vision should be "It depends on your vision".Remove "that" after the bracket.

The most striking example, not examples. Too much use of comma.Fullstop might be useful.
I think the essay is ok but check the grammar and punctuations.:)


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