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The given chart compares the amount of sales taking different products: games software, DVD and CDs



tiaDS 73 / 222  
Jan 19, 2014   #1
The chart below gives information about global sales of games software, CDs and DVD or video. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information.

The given chart compares the amount of sales taking different products: games software, DVD/Video and CDs sold during a particular period of time over ranging 2000 to 2003.

Overall, looking backward 2003-2000, the amount of sold games software was a steady rise during the three years. Meanwhile, DVD/Video had more double amount of sales than in the 2000. However, the amount of sold CDs was a significant decrease from 2000 to 2003.

Turning to the chart, the sales of games software had a slight increase from 2000 to 2001 with 13-to-15 billion dollars, continued to 18 billion dollars in the 2002. Moreover, it was a peak in the 2003 with nearly 20 billion dollars.

More detailed look at the data indicates that between 2000 and 2001, the sales of DVD/video increased dramatically better the following years, with approximately 18-and-22 billion dollars. From 2002 onwards, the amount of sales suddenly began to grow sharply to 27 billion dollars, next continued to nearly 31 billion dollars in the 2003.

Moreover, the global products of CD achieved the highest amount in the 2000, while had a steady decline over 34 billion dollars in the 2001. Standing in contrast, this figure fell to a low of only 32 billion dollar in 2002, not leveling off until the end of year.


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SHanafi 120 / 357  
Jan 20, 2014   #2
Overall, looking backward 2003-2000,the amount of sold games software was a steady rise during the three years.

as far as I know, amount suitable for uncountable. For countable "number" using is preferable.

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dumi 1 / 6793  
Jan 20, 2014   #3
Overall, a very good structure. Your introduction and overview parts have come off very nicely.

... I wish you adopt a more formal tone here in this task. This task aims at assessing your report writing skills and therefore you should have adopt a more reporting tone. Clarity is important to give an account on graphical interpretation, but everything should be said very concisely.
MelisaStewart - / 7  
Jan 24, 2014   #4
The above listed chart about the Global sales of games software, CDs and DVD or video is quite informative and also one can go through the same to attain some specific information regarding the same.
Pahan 1 / 1824  
Jan 24, 2014   #5
good introduction :)

.... Overview should not contain data. So, you could have taken off "2003-2000"
You do not discuss details in the overview, but only the main trends and observations. Then you can move into body paragraphs to discuss the details. It is good to have about two paras that discuss similarities and differences of the trends.
OP tiaDS 73 / 222  
Jan 24, 2014   #6
Pahan
thanks pahan for your advise, i have a new essay which is ielts task 1, please give me a correction, especially in 'overall'


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