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"What is a good son or a good daughter?" - TOEFL iBT sobject



mahrou 16 / 14  
Apr 8, 2011   #1
What are the important qualities of a good son or daughter? Have these qualities change or remain the same over time in your culture? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

A good son or daughter should have several merits especially in related to their parents that some of these important qualities are respecting to their parents, obedience from them, and caring them in their old ages. These qualities always have maintained during the times among most of cultures as mine. Some of my explanations for this belief listed below.

We always owe our parents because of their countless efforts and devotions for growing us. So, it is our duty that obey them in all their true commands although their commands are in opposite on our willing. Also, a goon son or daughter should respect to their parents and never do the works or say the statements that annoying them.

Moreover, our parents brought up us to the world and grew up us with all difficulties in the life; they woke up during all the nights when we was ill, they helped us to learning our lessons during our education, and whenever we need help they supported us in critical times of our life. So, in their old ages that we leaved them and became the independent life we never did forget care and support them in this period. A good son or daughter even lived in far from their parents, most of the times go to their home or telephone to them to show their concerning about their parents and inform from their healthy and situation.

Additionally, although we select our future wife or husband for living with her or him, we should respect to the idea of our parents about our selection and if they opposite with it we should convince them with good reasons and correct behaviors; of course if they have false.

In conclusion a good child, son or daughter, should have many good traits in related to other people specially their parents. They should have obedience and respect to their parents and take care of them in the old. This believe never did change in times in our culture.

Scientiana 12 / 42  
Apr 9, 2011   #2
Additionally, when we select our future wife or husband for living with her or him , we should respect to the idea of our parents about our selection. If they disagree with it, we should convince them with good reasons and good manners, of course if they are wrong.

In conclusion, a good child son or daughter, should have many good traits in related to other peopleespecially their parents. They should have obedience and respect to their parents and take care of them intheir old age . This belief has never changedin times in our culture.

Note: I think "bringing us up" is a better word than "growing us up". Moreover, you should have a space after each paragraphs.
OP mahrou 16 / 14  
Apr 9, 2011   #3
Dear scientiana thank you so much :)
xuelai 1 / 1  
Apr 9, 2011   #4
I believe that a good son or good daughter can take the responsibility of taking care of their parents. Apart from that, he or she can support their parents while they need help. In addition, a good son or good daughter can learn to be a good listener when their parents feel lonely or helpless,even their close relatives' soulmate.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Apr 10, 2011   #5
I'm always impressed when I see an essay that Anikka helped with. Very good work here!

I'll give some other suggestions:

A good son or daughter should have several merits, especially merits related to their behavior toward their parents. Some of these important qualities are ...

We always owe our parents because of their countless efforts and devotions for growing us.----very good sentence! I would use "raising us" instead of "growing us."

So, it is our duty that obey them in all their true commands although even when their commands are the opposite of what we want.

Also, a goon good son or daughter should respect to their parents and never do the works or say the statements that annoying them. or say things that annoy them.

In conclusion a good child, son or daughter, should have many good traits related to other people, especially their parents. ----This is another great sentence! I just made a small change to it.

:-)
ARIA 16 / 36  
Apr 10, 2011   #6
Hi Mahru
As you see on Annika correction, she or he corrected those part that I told you before are not based on English thinking. It is good idea to keep those parts and consider those for your future writing.

try shorter sentences. long sentenses make you prone for gramatical mistakes.
for example the below sentense

Moreover, our parents brought up us to the world and grew up us with all difficulties in the life; they woke up during all the nights when we was ill, they helped us to learning our lessons during our education, and whenever we needneeded help they supported us in critical times of our life.

good luck and keep on try
OP mahrou 16 / 14  
Apr 11, 2011   #7
DEAR kevin, xuelai & Scientiana

thanks a lot for your helps :)

Dear aria
Thank you so much for your consideration. I will try to correct my sentences in follow threads. :)


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