Writing 2: Should the government encourage a certain percentage of jobs to be reserved for women?

Men do most of the high-level jobs. Should the government encourage a certain percentage of these jobs to be reserved for women?

Use your own knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Different jobs for both gender

With the rising of women's consciousness, there are more and more people advocate gender parity. Especially in work place, men dominate the more high positions than women do currently. I believe the government should protect a certain quota of the high-level jobs for women.

The first reason is, obviously, men and women are definitely different in physical aspects. Thus, when it comes to the job regarding physical factor, for example, cement porter, women tend to show the less abilities than men do. Besides labor conditions, there is no reason for women to reach the same achievement as men do.

The next reason I am on the position of supporting the government reserve the jobs for women is that it can stimulate the diversities. Because of sexual stereotype, the public often think women are emotional and cannot think as logical as men do. In my opinion, that argument is quite unfair since men are equal mad and exaggerated. Hence, women can use this kind of personality adequately, thinking in more considerate and detailed ways. Particularly for the higher positions, they usually need to manager people. I suppose that having more gender can boost more spark in career.

Having said that, the opposite people argue that the behavior of limiting the certain percentage for specific gender is ironically against the parity itself. However, the history proofs that women had been treated as second people for a long time. Compare to men, women got the working right after World War two, which was less than a hundred year to now. Therefore, I strongly support that ensuring the women working right is the right path toward a equal society.

To conclude, it seems reasonably clear that the government should be encouraged to make a growth of high position quantity for women.

Hello Arlen,

I think you make strong arguments advocating for your position in favor of the government reserving job slots for women; specifically, in jobs where physical strength doesn't matter, to encourage diversity, and historically.

To improve, you may want to sharpen your grammatical accuracy to convey your ideas more clearly.

Good luck to you!

Arlen, in your opening statement, you strongly support the idea that positions should be reserved for women. However, you run a counter argument to that in the next paragraph. Rather than contradicting yourself, that paragraph should have instead, indicated that there is a difference between men and women, but that the difference does not lessen the capacity of a woman to succeed in a male field or work. The rest of your reasoning aligns itself properly with the prompt requirements and shows that you are capable of defending your stance, even if it is in a limited English writing capacity. While there are mistakes in your sentence development, it does not distract too much from your sentiment in the essay. So the essay has some pretty good points that can gain it a score of 5 overall. The low score stems from the situation that paragraph 2 created for your essay.