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IELTS essay: Should the government pay the tuition fees for students?


Helinkway 2 / 4  
Jul 20, 2013   #1
In recent years, education is becoming an issue of great concern in many countries, because it plays an important role for the development of each country. The question of whether or not the tuition fee should be covered by the government remains controversial. Personally, I strongly believe that students should pay their own university education because of three following reasons.

The first reason for my belief is the limitation of governments' budget. To be more specific, they have to pay for many other essential aspects, such as health care, environment, national security, science, and so on. Furthermore, the government has already invested in building schools, libraries, and supported for equipment, books, and the like. Students nowadays just pay tuition fees for salary of teaching staff and for improving of learning facilities.

Secondly, paying their own education fees may lead to better studying. Indeed, almost all people are often more responsible when they have to give out something. Students will be more likely to attend classes and try hard for studying. Therefore, they will have better academic results. In addition, universities usually have scholarships for good students, hence, if they want to get money back, they have to study much more in order to get best marks to achieve the scholarship.

Finally, students tend to find a part-time job when the government does not cover tuition fees. Because some students cannot afford their education fees, they have to earn money to pay for study materials. When they do part-time jobs, they will gain more experience which helps their future career.

In conclusion, it's my opinion that the educational authority should not cover the tuition fees for students. Money that students and their family have to pay brings many benefits not only for their country's development, but also for themselves.

temptprovidence 8 / 163 35  
Jul 20, 2013   #2
governments' budget

it must be government's budget.its singular

Students nowadays just pay tuition feesfor salary of teaching staff and for improving of learning facilities.

for the improvements

Furthermore, the government has already invested in building schools, libraries, and supported for equipment, books, and the like

has supported.

it plays an important role for the development of each country.

in

you have defended your view well. BEST OF LUCK:)
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Jul 20, 2013   #3
In recent years, education is becoming an issue of great concern in many countries, because it plays an important role for the development of each country.

... your idea has a fundamental error.... education is not an issue for any country. However, funding education can be an issue of concern. This is what I suggest;

Education plays a vital role for the development of a country. However, not every single person can have access to education due to high costs involved with it. Therefore, some people argue that the cost of education should be borne by the governments.
OP Helinkway 2 / 4  
Jul 22, 2013   #4
Thank you all for your feedback!
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Jul 22, 2013   #5
The first reason for my belief is the limitation of governments' budget.

This point may sound better like this..
First of all, there must be a limit to what the government should spend. ... This gives it a bit more life I believe..

Students nowadays just pay tuition fees for salary of teaching staff and for improving of learning facilities.

I'm not quite sure whether I understand what you mean by this.. Are you trying to say that tutoring has become a full time job and that tuition fees has become the tutor's livelihood? If so I agree with your idea..

There is a problem however when it comes to which region of the world you are writing about.. When it comes to Asian countries (specially the sub continent..) almost every student goes for tuition and it's fairly cheap too.. But when you consider the western world tutors do not have as many students but they charge much more than Asian tutors do..

Secondly, paying their own education fees may lead to better studying.

.. Good point.. Stress on how they would not like their money wasted...

Finally, students tend to find a part-time job when the government does not cover tuition fees.

.. Again, this does not apply to everywhere around the world.. But the point holds true for most regions..

Overall I think this is a good essay.. :D


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