Government should sponsor to build up museum and theatre .

Do you agree or disagree with the statement that government should invest on museum and theatre?

As to whether government should sponsor on museum and theatre, the public hold different opinions. Some of them argue that government should invest on material industies that can develop poeple's life level. On the other hand, the others hold that life level includes both material level and mental level, which museum and theatre' construction will be helpful to improve. In my opinion investment on museum and theatre will help the growth of job an economy, will enrich people's public life, and will be helpful for cultural industry's development.

First of all, people may benefit from government's investment on museum and theatre, because they may get comercial profit and jobs from it. Since the construction need building materials， many related industries may benefit profit from the construction. Also, museums and theatres need workers to build, to watch, to guide visitors, to preserv and so on. These jobs will provide many job opportunities to the citizens. For example, people visiting the theatre would like to get a introduction about the the theatre on play today, so the theatre may offer a booklet, which will expand the bussiness of press and will need people to distribute them to the visitors.

Secondly, people's life will be enriched by museum and theatre. On family days, parents can take children to museum. Not only can they share time togather, but also they may know more about arts, history，and science. As to theatre, a beautiful theatre can lead people to another world, which let people relax. For instancd, a Chinese Opera may offer audience a chance to know Chinese costumes, Chinese music, and Chinese makeup.

Lastly, the construction of museum and theatre may let work of art and theatre performance have more alternative space to show. In addition, museums and theatres operated by government will make the price more competitive so that start-up artists and performers be able to show more of their works. Thus, building up theatre and museum will encourage the development of creative industries.

In summary, economic, public life, and cultural industries will all benefit from the construction of theatre and museum, so it is better for the government to choose to build up theatre and museum.

"To start with, government's sponsoring to build up museum and theatre will encourage cultural growth in the society, which is a priority for government. As we all know, a nation can be rich in every material sense, but, if it fails to provide for and nurture creative expression, it is impoverished in immeasurable ways." This is the sort of thing you want to avoid in an essay, you have a point, but you don't prove it in any way, there's no evidence. You can't just say that a culture that fails ti nurture creative expression is impoverished in countless ways, to make this effective you need to show us WHY that hurts a country so bad and why its worth investing in.

"Furthermore, building museum and theatre helps ensure that people have access to artistic experiences. In addition, the establishment of museum and theatre will improve arts presentations or exhibitions so that people can enjoy vibrant arts and culture. It also increases access for people to performing arts, visual arts, media arts, museum collections, and heritage displays. In conclusion, investing money to build up museum and theatre will lift public cultural level and enrich public life." You need to define a public "cultural level," its a phrase which is far too nebulous to be effectively used in an argument. I would lay down a concrete definition early on and then expand on it from there, additionally, I would consolidate this into your first body paragraph since they are similar and both pretty short.

"Ultimately, there is a positive economic impact of investment in theses creative industries, since museum and theatre's construction definitely will create jobs and growth in the industry. On one hand, it can provide sustainable and rewarding employment. On the other hand, museum and theatre, as regional projects, will provide an economic benefit to those regions, because heritage tourism is a major foreign exchange earner world wide. Thus, museum and theatre's construction will contribute a great deal to economic growth and prosperity." First off you don't want to use "on one hand" and "on the other" here, it implies a contrast whereas in reality you are making two positive points which are in the same vein. This may be your stronger paragraph because you supply some actual evidence, "heritage tourism is a major foreign exchange earner world-wide." However, it would behoove you to expand on this example and preferably use some actual figures.

My last complaint is that your essay doesn't follow the progression you put forward in your intro. You say you're going to talk about why: "the government should invest money to build up museum and theatre to develop the nation's arts and culture, create jobs and growth in the industry, and enhance people's access to a diverse range of cultural choices." But you instead talk about: "Building up the nations arts and culture, building up on the nations arts and culture ( you need to make a clearer distinction between these two points in your essay), and the material benefits. You need to follow your own order and point set forward in the intro, its the reader guide and it will read in a lot easier and more organized manner if they know whats coming.

Benn_Myers
Thank you very very much. I will rewrite this essay. I really hope you will read it and provide suggestions.

As to whether government should sponsor on the building of a museum and a theatre, the public holds different opinions.

Some of them argue that government should invest on in material industries that can develop people 's life level economic success.

On the other hand, the others hold that life level success includes both material level and mental level aspects, and that the construction of a museum and theatre will be helpful for improving life on the mental level.

So, remember these corrections. Here are the correct ways:
The building of a museum and a theatre will be...
...we can invest on in the project.-----"invest in"
...the construction of a museum and a theatre may make it possible for works of art and theatre performances to have more alternative space opportunity to be shared.

You are doing very well! Keep practicing!