Are governments and corporations the only organizations that can enhance the environment?

responsibility for solving the problems of environment

Please help me review my essay. Thank you from the bottom of my heart.

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
You should write at least 250 words.

There is a common belief that governments and corporations are the only organizations that can enhance the environment, and individuals do not have responsibility for it. I reckon that all of them have contributed to the improvement of our environment, so I do disagree with the one-sided belief mentioned.

On the one hand, the efforts made to enhance the environment are more likely to be successful with the aid of governments and corporations. With scientific researches supported by them, a lot of effective approaches are launched to resolve the problems related to our environment, which can save time and money in the fight against the environmental crisis. For example, UNEF gives financial aids for a cluster of researchers to seek a solution in the hopes of getting rid of the waste plastic that is ubiquitous at every corner in the world.

On the other hand, individuals whose roles in the improvement of our environment are seemingly underestimated also play pivotal parts in the fight against the crisis. They obey most of the rules enacted by the governments, which makes the progress to resolve the problems easier. For example, most households make efforts to divide the rubbish based on its characteristics, which can ease the process of categorizing it.

In conclusion, although governments and corporations have a larger responsibility for solving the problems, nobody can deny the significant roles of individuals.

This essay does not follow the required format for the Task 2 essay. The main reason it will not get a passing score is because if does not meet the minimum 250 word requirement. You wrote only 230 words. A percentage of points, based on the missing word count will be applied to the TA section of this essay. Additionally, you created a comparative essay discussion rather than the required single opinion discussion. You already indicated a disagreement with the given text. You should have presented 2 reasons as to why you disagree with the idea provided within 2 separate paragraphs. Remember the question was: "To what extent..." Based on the question, there is an unspoken requirement that you defend your point of view, based on reasons that show an extent of your disagreement. The most applicable format for this discussion would have been:

Notable corporations make a difference in preserving our habitat by using environmentally designs. Campuses as built by Google and Facebook help to keep the greens intact around the buildings. It is not only corporations that can do this. Individuals can also accomplish a similar task by landscaping their homes. Thus negating the idea that only corporations can make a difference in improving our surroundings....

The government is tasked to preserve the environment through various projects. They do not need to do it alone. By implementing community based preservation programs individuals may be encouraged ....

This is only a suggested discussion approach. This is the discussion type that allows you to prove that your point of view is correct, based on the way that the other discussion is improperly framed.

By the way, your paraphrase is a run on sentence. You need to split the content of the first sentence into 2. That means, you should be presenting a 3 sentence paragraph, which would help you meet the minimum word requirement. The concluding paraphrase is short by 2 sentences to meet the paragraph minimum requirement as well. It does not offer a proper restatement of the given discussion and your reasons, along with a reiteration of your opinion. All of these would have helped you meet the minimum word count, but not necessarily a better discussion presentation because you did not properly address the task.

Can I ask you a question?
Are the way that I use vocabulary unnatural?