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IELTS; governments should give financial support to creative artists



fahadbd 25 / 55  
Sep 22, 2013   #1
Some people think that governments should give financial support to creative artists such as painters and musicians. Others believe that creative artists should be funded by alternative sources. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

Arts enrich our lives and society. Artists create their own thought that has a significant impact on the way of life. Their creativity is appreciated and helpful for the nations. But people have different view that whether authority supports their fundings or they will go for alternative sources. I believe both government and other sources should be funded.

Governments do need to look at creative artists. Because any genuine artist aims to make some arts better for his native land. In art project a huge money needs to create, financial support is vital for them otherwise, it is impossible for them to build a new project. They require government's assistance and help. There are many works in public the place for example, in my country, sculptures and statues are erected in the centre of cross-roads. These symbolize our liberation war. So it is easy for us to practice our cultural activities. They serve to protect our culture and heritage and we are proud about them.

In addition, people express their view that financial assistance should be generated by alternative sources. The reason is likely to be that the governments spend money on public services such as general treatment, education and fabrics. These public facilities are fundamental for a country to function properly. Provision to creative artist is a waste of money. Another reason is, some artists create arts as a passion and profession. Their arts are neither rich nor famous but they continue to produce arts as a passion.

Finally, arts affect everywhere of our natural movement however, I believe apart from the flipside government funding is to be ensured to create arts.

hpatel 3 / 6  
Sep 23, 2013   #2
Nice intro...

Governments do need to look at creative artists. Because any genuine artist aims to makesome arts better for his native land. In art project a huge money needs to create, financial supportwhich is vital for them otherwise, it is impossible for them to build a new project.

here third line will make a good start of the para then the first line.
some better arts
money is required/needed

Finally, arts affect everywhere of our natural movement however, I believe apart from the flipside , government funding is to be ensured to create arts

Quite confusing..
dumi 1 / 6793  
Sep 23, 2013   #3
Good feedback from gmad06 as always.
@gmad06 - I wish you become a contributor to this forum. In fact I'm inviting you to be one and help others writing. If you are interested, please tell me :)

Governments do need to look atafter creative artists.

@fahadbd - You need to align your writing more with the prompt. Your focus here should be on discussing whether it is the government or other sources who should fund creative artists. Very little is written to address that.


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