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Writing Task 1 - The graph above shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974


mardian24 46 / 75  
Nov 7, 2016   #1
The graph above shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.

The line graph illustrates the number of stuff in million tonnes that has been delivered by four methods of transportation from 1974 to 2002 in the UK. Overall, it can be seen that there is an upward trend over twenty eight-years period and road is the highest transportation that is used in the same period with always more than sixty.

In 1974, road had higher number to deliver goods at about 70 than pipeline only at about 5. Between 1974 and1978 there was a slight increase in the number of roads but pipeline was steady. In the following years, pipeline went up to about 20 while road had a fluctuation. After that, in 2001 road hit a high point at about 95 which pipeline still the lowest number of four categories with about 20.

In the other hand, the equipment transported by rail and water almost the same number with about 38. After there was a cross between rail and water, water increased and water fell in 1978. From 1986 to 1990 rail and water were steady at about 37 and about 60 respectively.

IvanMS027 43 / 56 9  
Nov 7, 2016   #2
Hi mr. Mardian. Here are my suggestions for you

... stuff in million tonnes that has been delivered by four methods ...

use the present perfect tense when the data is available until the present time (assumption 2016).

... but pipeline was steady (at ?).
... while road had a fluctuation (try to write down the data for the road) .

Overall, you present the data in a well-developed and simple form.
again, don't forget to upload the graph before starting new thread.

Goodluck and Keep Spirited.
faizunaa17 49 / 91  
Nov 7, 2016   #3
in million tonnes that has been delivered by four methods ...

1) You cant use present pefect because it is past time

... with always more than sixty ?????.

2] what the unit of measurement? You don't mention it before.

After that, in 2001 road hit a high highest point at about ...

3) Be Careful of superlative form
ReskiRamadani88 43 / 57 5  
Nov 7, 2016   #4
Hello Mardian, let me give you some suggestions
... the number of stuff(S )(It is better if you change it into plural form because there are many stuffs in quantity ) in million tonnes that has(so, then you change the verb agreement ) been delivered by four methods of transportation(s ) from 1974 to ...

After that, in 2001 (be careful l) road hit a high (highest ) point at about 95 which pipeline (was ) still the lowest ...

keep practising
Beauty17 56 / 88 5  
Nov 7, 2016   #5
Hallo.. here some notes about your essay..

... illustrates the number of stuff(stuff is informal, you can replace it with items or products) in million tonnes that hashad been delivered by ...

... used in the same period with always more than sixty (do not put any figures in overview ).

InOn the other hand,(...) same number with about approximately 38.
... steady at about 37 and about 60 respectively.

Good luck


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