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The graph gives information about employment categories of a country in 2003 and 2013.



isoldelin 1 / -  
Jan 26, 2025   #1
The graph illustrates how many adults worked in different categories of a country in 2003 and 2013.

Overall, there was a decrease in the proportion of people who worked in business and medical, while the reverse trend can be seen in the figures for the other employment categories. In addition, the majority of people who did business in both years.

The percentage of workers in the business aspect started at approximately 45% in 2003, after which it experienced a consistent decline to just over 30% in 2013. Similar changes, but to a lesser extent, can be seen in the figure for medical, which decreased a halved, ending at about 11% in 2013.

Only 8% of workers were in education training in 2003, with a subsequent rise to 16% after a decade. Similar changes can be seen in the figure for building categories, which rose from just over 10% to nearly 20%. Additionally, there was a significant increase in the proportion of employees who worked in the hotel industry, were self-employed, and were unemployed throughout the period. Just only 3% of workers were in the hotel industry in 2003, increasing six times in ten years later. The figure for self-employed and unemployed saw similar changes, from just over 10% to over 30% and 11% to 31% respectively.


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Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15526  
Jan 26, 2025   #2
You must do a correct image identification in the summary overview to achieve maximum scoring consideration for that section. You cannot just indicate a graph because there are several types of graphs used in the Task 1 essay. The most common graphs used in task 1 are line graphs and columnar bar graphs. Identify the image accordingly to meet accuracy requirements. Do not make it a habit to cut and paste information from the instructions. You are scored on your ability to paraphrase that. Forced errors are created when you simply cut and paste from the original.

In addition, the majority of people who did business in both years.

So what? What do you want to say in this sentence? The thought presentation is incomplete.

Your paragraphs are composed mostly of run on sentences. You should be providing at least 3 sentences in each paragraph. Do not compress your information into single sentences. You have to present one idea in each sentence in order to receive proper C+C scoring.


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