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# The graph illustrates the proportion of males and females passing the driving test from 1980 to 2010

thiendi226 1 / 2
Oct 8, 2021   #1
The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010.

## Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph illustrates the proportion of males and females passing the driving test from 1980 to 2010.
Overall, it can be seen that the driving test passed by women and men increased over the period. In addition, women passing this test higher than men on the given chart.

Looking at the chart in more detail, it is evident that the driving test pass rate of women stood at about 48% in 1980 and then rose to just around 50% in 1990. This figure then continued to go up significantly to nearly 70% in the next ten years, which was the highest point on the given graph. Subsequently, the proportion of passing rate driving test of females went down to approximately 64% at the end of the period.

Turning to the second data set, it is obvious that there was a dramatic increase in the percentage of men passing the driving test from about 28% in 1980 to around 38% in 1990. This figure then rose to just under 50% in 2000 and remain stable until the year 2010.

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Oct 10, 2021   #2
In addition, women passing this test higher than men on the given chart.

A trending statement indicates the major flow movement of the measurement. The reference above is the properly referenced trend of the bar chart. The first reference is not really a trend as if references both genders as equal in consideration.

The graph illustrates

Wrong image identification. The image is a bar chart, not a graph.A graph is composed of a fluctuating measurement line or series of lines. A bar graph uses fluctuating bars as seen above.

The comparison report is uneven. Do not focus on only one gender, leaving the second barely reviewed. Aim to compare the images using a uniform criteria. Review the second part with the same representation considerations. If one has 3 sentences then, the other should too.
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Oct 11, 2021   #3
You had one comparison on the overall and I think the essay need more specific comparison. You focused too much on the trend so as forget what the task requires. You should compare the changes in percentage between years to each other instead of describing the pattern by the time (just 1,2 sentences, don't too much)

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