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(IELTS graph) Population of turtles in India


joythblessy 86 / 272 15  
Feb 12, 2013   #1
The given bar chart gives the information about the population of turtles in India between the years from 1980 to 2012, which include Leatherblack Turtles, green turtles, Olive Ridley and all species.

From the graph it is clear that, all categories of turtles were only 100 in 1980. It showed significant growth and falls during all these 22 yrs. All given categories of turtles population increased with marginal drop still 1984. Thereafter, up to 1999 all categories decreased except Olive Ridley. Green turtles had succeeded in maintaining their population between 90-100, while the population of all species stayed between 100-110 between the years 1998 to 2012.

Though, Olive Ridley turtles has shown a significant sharp growth in their population up to 1997, the following years it displayed a fluctuation in their population. It maintained the level of 130-120 from the years 1996 to 2012. On the contrary, Letherback turtles showed a continuous decrease with marginal increase and decrease, and reached the level of 60 in 1012 from 110 in the year 1987.

In short, all species and green turtles remain constant roughly over the period of last decade with minimal deviations. Latherback turtles has showed a downward trend in their population, while Olive Ridley turtles has increased the population and maintain the average population between the years 1996-2012.


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ah_zafari [Contributor] 40 / 672 148  
Feb 12, 2013   #2
Your writing skill is good as you can use appropriate vocabulary and grammar. However, in IELTS writing task 1 you have to consider two important points: 1) use more comparative sentences. Try to compare the results provided in graphs; 2) Use numbers. If you do not consider these two points, you cannot get a good score in this task.

The given bar chart gives thesome information about the population of turtles in India between the years from 1980 to 2012, which include Leatherblack Turtles, green turtles, Olive Ridley and all species.(It would be better to write this sentence separately. In addition, you should write a general trend at the end of the introduction)
OP joythblessy 86 / 272 15  
Feb 12, 2013   #3
hai Ahmad...

Thanks a lot for your concern and guidence..
I have not much idea about how to write a graph..

I feel this may be the reason of my less score....(Ř›

Thank you so much once again for your help...

Tessy
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Feb 13, 2013   #4
It showed significant growth and falls during all these 22 yrs.

It shows significant rises and falls in a span of 22 years.

Green turtles had succeeded in maintaining their population between 90-100, while the population of all species stayed between 100-110 between the years 1998 to 2012.

ummmm... the population of leatherback turtles have dropped dramatically since 1987. And it's only around 60 in 2012. Oh and the population of Olive Ridley turtles have incereased to 120 by 2012.So...

Green turtles have succeeded in maintaining a population between 90-100, whereas the population of Leatherback turttles have decreased dramatically to 60 by 2012. The population of Olive Ridley Turtles have gone up to 120 by 2012.
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Feb 13, 2013   #5
From the graph it is clear that, all categories of turtles were only 100 in 1980. It showed significant growth and falls during all these 22 yrs. All given categories of turtles population increased with marginal drop still 1984. Thereafter, up to 1999 all categories decreased except Olive Ridley. Green turtles had succeeded in maintaining their population between 90-100, while the population of all species stayed between 100-110 between the years 1998 to 2012.

This is good. You have attempted to give a background idea about the trends in the introduction. However, try to organize the trends in a certain way. I mean first talk about the most general patern. (less detailed) In this diagram you can observe Olive R has a has an upward trend in growth, LeatherB a sharp declining trend and the other two margianl upward and downward. So, just tell this most obvious observation first. That's a smooth start. Then in the next para, take each trend and discuss them with more facts and figures. (more detailed)
OP joythblessy 86 / 272 15  
Feb 14, 2013   #6
hai Dumi and Pahan..

Hai dumi..

Thanks for the link you provided through Khof's thread. I was in search of that link which was skipped from me...):
Thanks for the guidence and support..

Hai pahan...
thanks for your correction..

Tessy


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