earnings of three bakeries in Calgary
The line graph illustrates the annual revenue of Amandine Bakery, Mari Bakeshop, and Bolo Cakery, over 10 years, from 2000 to 2010.
It was no doubt recognizing the upward trend of Bolo and Amandine's annual income over those years, while Mary Bakershop tended to downward sharply.
In detail, for the first 5 years, Mari Bakeshop earned the highest income, with $80,000 in total. By contrast, Amandine and Bolo gained only $20,000 and $60,000 respectively. During those years, Mari seemed to be the most popular one among the three bakeries in Calgary.
However, the situation changed significantly from 2005 to 2010. The annual revenue of Amandine had increased remarkably and reached a peak of more than $100.000 in 2010. The development of Bolo Bakery was as same as Amandine during this period. The bakery earned more than $60.000 in 2010.
On the other hand, growing up in Mari Bakeshop was in the opposite direction. After reaching nearly $100,000 in revenue in 2005, Mari's income tended to fall down gradually from 2006 and then remained stable at about $40,000/year for 2 years continuously.
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