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Be grateful to the people!; My life LESSON


jamesjustice 1 / -  
Mar 12, 2013   #1
please read and could you make it look better please and thank you... :)
Dr. Q
My life lesson

There are a lot of life lessons that I had learned throughout my entire life. The most important lesson that I learned is to always be grateful for the people that I have and not take them for granted, especially if they are family. But sometimes because we are young or don't care we tend to not appreciate what we have until we lose them completely and we regret it because sooner or later we realize that we miss them in our lives because somehow they were important to us.

When I was a little girl, my aunt always took care of me and for free since my parents had to work and they were away from home most of the time and because they recently bought a house around that time they didn't have enough money to pay for a typical babysitter. My aunt was an amazing person; honestly she was one of the greatest people in this world. She did anything for me to keep me satisfied and happy, but I did not realize it until it was already too late; she passed away on Valentine's Day from breast cancer. While she was fighting with cancer she still had a smile on her face, I never saw her mad at anything. My aunt did pretty much everything she was a super woman to me, she took care of my three cousins and she still had the power to take care of me at the same time. She always took me everywhere with my cousins, she treated me like her daughter and not just her niece. Whenever I was hungry or I needed to buy something for a school project she would immediately go to the store and get it for me and that's how nice she was, she didn't care if it was too late or if she was tired. But one time everything changed, I realized that I was 13 years old, I felt like a grown up at that stage of my life, I thought that I was too old to have my aunt take care over me. I told her that she shouldn't take care of me like if I was a 5 year old. One time I was with my close friend outside after school and she came over and told me that I had to go because it was time for me to leave and that I had to eat at a certain time with my cousins and her because those were her rules. I was angry at her so without thinking I yelled at her and I told her that she wasn't my mother to tell me what to do or not to and that I was already "old" enough to take care of myself. She didn't say anything, but I could tell that she was surprised of how I reacted so she just left without saying a single word, I felt bad, but somehow I still didn't care. Later that day when it was already 8:00 PM I went into my room to sleep I saw a note saying, "I'm very sorry Stephanie for treating you like a little girl, please forgive me." I threw the note on the floor, I didn't care at all. The next day she woke me up telling me that she made breakfast for me, my favorite breakfast, but I told her that I wasn't hungry so I just left to school.

A year later passed, my parents thought that I didn't needed my aunt to take care of me because I was already a teenager and responsible for my age. Well, about two months later my parents received a phone call at midnight informing them that my aunt just had passed away from cancer. I burst out in tears, I felt bad that she died without me having a chance to tell her that I was sorry how I treated her in the past because of my ignorance.

Every year on Valentine's Day I get very depressed because the first thing that comes to my mind when I wake up is my aunt that was always there for me, she was my second mother. There's not a single day that I don't think of her. I wish I could take everything back but I can't. Now that she passed away she made me realize that I should never take a person for granted because you never know what may happen and that's why I'm always grateful for still having the rest of my family with me.

lunga211 1 / 1  
Mar 12, 2013   #2
you have a lot of run-on sentences. Instead of having statement...and...statement try making another sentence by separating the two statements with a period
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Mar 12, 2013   #3
There are a lot of life lessons that I had learned throughout my entire life. The most important lesson that I learned is to always be grateful for the people that I have and not take them for granted, especially if they are family.

.... why you need to grateful? you better give some hint about it;
There are many events and experiences that taught me lessons for life. However, the most important lesson I learned is that I should be grateful to the people who love and care for me.

But sometimes because we are young or don't care we tend to not appreciate what we have until we lose them completely and we regret it because sooner or later we realize that we miss them in our lives because somehow they were important to us.

Sometimes, our young immature minds take things for granted; we do not take others feelings seriously and do not appreciate what they do for our betterment until we lose them forever. Then only we would start realizing the value of these people and how important they had been for us.


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