Thank you for your kind help and advice.
Your suggestions are helpful as you have pointed out the weakness in my essay, such that I could develop my writing skills.
Thank you. I truly appreciate your inspection. My grammar needs to be improved as well as my words are often way too extreme. I like to hear your suggestions on how thing should be written. In fact, I find that it is very hard for me (who is not accustom to using the language) to express my thought.
Thank you for giving your thoughtful analysis, making precise corrections and expressing your opinion on my writing.
Technology has revolutionized lifestyle, attitudes and behavior of people.
is a very perfect way to say. I really like your analysis, and your expression which reflects how I should improve my writing.
. Thank you for your insightful correction and careful consideration on my essay.
Instead of blaming calculator for spoiling children's quantitative aptitude skills, we should blame educators, or may be their parents, who give up to difficulty during the process of learning of their child ?????? this is not clear to the reader at all :( .
In fact, I was trying to say that even if calculator is often blamed for causing the lack of mathematical skills in children, parents and educators should be responsible for their children's failure, too. To me, if their parents/educators would have paid close attention to their children's math skills, this problem would not happen at all. Parents/ teachers should have notice the lack of calculation skills due to the use of calculators, and hence, they could help their children understand when the tools should be used. I believe this can also be extended to the problem of children using calculators instead of mental calculation because the children want to make the good score. It is often to see parents pushing their children to be the greatest one at school, but they may neglect the fact that children may do the right things such as using the calculators to finish their homework. I am afraid that my words do not demonstrate my thought clearly. I would love to if you would suggest an alternative way of saying this. ^ ^
Thank you again for all of your helps and suggestions. : )