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Handedness, the article about music and sports


andika08 81 / 80 16  
Nov 22, 2016   #1
The topic talked about handedness, a speaker took example from Mathew who has artikel about music and sports. To begin with many different sports that gave beneficial not only for sport, also to identify strategy in the game. Moreover, how important handedness was people can focus on their flexibility in one situation. Another research stated that mix handedness will increase their capacity on occupation. Moving to the another several different sports that the most player tend to use hand, feet and eye. For example, hocky and tennis sports, more needed the mix handed have significant chance as to be more confident than the single handed. In stark contast with playing instrument music such as a violinist with using one hand reaching the high of level handedness.

justivy03 - / 2,367 607  
Nov 22, 2016   #2
Hi Andika, my thoughts goes first to the fact that not all or not a lot of readers are actually familiar to the word, "handedness", I for one actually have to look it up and I must say it is one of those words that you fear or you worry to be included in such sentence, however, should you have the right sentence and the right idea or message to associate your word to, it's actually a very fun word to use.

Having said that, I have a few more suggestions for this summary essay.
- athe speaker took example from Mathew as an example
- who has artikel about music and sports. - I'm not sure what you mean by this phrase.

- To begin with,being handy in many different sports
- thatgavehas proven to be beneficial
- not only for sports ,
- Moreover, how important handedness wasis important so people can focus
- capacity onin finding their occupation.

There you have it Andika, I left a few sentences for you to practice your editing and proof reading skills and for future writing reference, I suggest that you focus on the proper construction of your sentences as it can be sometimes confusing.


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