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Is having dinner together important to people?



maiphuong1806 1 / 1  
Jul 29, 2023   #1

the advantages of family dinner



the hustle-bustle of everyday life, eating together has become a luxury. Therefore many families choose to rule out that activities from their schedule. Whether this change is positive or negative is still,in fact , under debate.

First, the problem appears to ensue from a matter of time. Parents are off to work from dusk to dawn so they are always pressed for time. Besides working time, children's upbringing and other family-gathering activities contribute to families constantly being on the go / in a hurry. Therefore, spending time cooking meals, as a consequence, is considered another burdensome chore and time-consuming.

However, sitting down together for dinner might help children, especially (those who are ) teenagers or young d adults, reap many benefits. It is vital to notice that having dinner together creates differences in eating habits among teenagers. Under such parents' obligation of more vegetable and fruit intake, or less fast food consumption as well; children can form a healthy diet at a very young age. That leads to weight control at youngsters much easier. Beyond nutritional benefits, dinner time is truly a precious respite for every single family member as it helps them get rid of the day-to-day existence of hassles. Moreover, eating together creates many family dynamics that allow parents to keep a close eye on their children. These supervisions may assist in stopping children suffering from the risk of premature drug abuse or school bullying.

To encapsulate, in my opinion, the advantages of family dinner have outweighed all sorts of hindrances that it creates. People should make the most of their day so as to have enough time for such meaningful and beneficial activities.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15388  
Aug 6, 2023   #2
Whether this change is positive or negative is still,in fact , under debate.

It is good to know that you are referencing the discussion options in your presentation. However, the requirement is for you to have a clear opinion. So, do you believe that this is a positive or negative matter? Without that clear reference to your point of view, the examiner will judge this paragraph as not having a proper writer's opinion. He will fail your score in that task aspect. Next time, answer the question directly. Offer a clear opinion, it is something you will benefit from in terms of scoring considerations.

the problem appears to ensue

This is not a discussion requirement. You should be focusing on the positive or negative aspect of the discussion. You are not being asked about the causes of the problem. You are being asked to discuss the positive or negative aspect of the discussion. You have not met the discussion parameters for a passing score.


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