IELTS TASK 1; Hawaiian island chain in the center of Pacific Ocean

The map shows Hawaiian island chain in the center of Pacific Ocean. There are eight major islands and it is active volcano.
The Hawaiian chain is the oldest volcano dates back 80 million years ago. The youngest volcano develops build by numerous eruptions this happens because pacific tectonic plate moves from north to west by direction of shift of the pacific tectonic plate (7-9 cm per year).

Each island was started eruption process in originating 2883 km down. Hotspot spume remains static to form kitchen magma. There is vein as line magma to out to surface.

Overall, Hawaiian island is an active volcano it is caused by moved the pacific plate.

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I feel your answer does not contain the minimum word requirement for this task. Does it?

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Follow Pahan's suggestion to reorganize your essay structure.

thanks dumi for your suggestion. i will write better than before.

i know i have many incorrect in writing that is because i still learn about english and how to write a correct.

Mechanics are good. However, you misconstrue in the pict.

A small tip:
Read as many authentic texts/ samples of IELTS writings as you can to improve your writing skills. Reading texts not only improves your vocab and grammar, but it also gives you some new ideas about different topics.

A few tips for maps in IELTS from google
Generally there are two types of maps in the IELTS test. First, they may give us two maps of the same place but in different times (e.g 1940, 2010). They ask us to write a report on how this place had changed over time. Let's call such maps diachronic. Second, they give us one single map and ask us to describe two locations on them or even compare them. Let's call them synchronic maps.

Diachronic maps
Intro: here you should state what the maps show
Overview: state what the direction of change is (is the city more modernized, has it turned to a tourist attraction/resort, etc)
Body: start with the most obvious changes and then try to cover all the changes.

Synchronic maps.
Intro: here you should state what the maps show
Overview: depending on what the purpose of those points are, give an opinion about which one may serve our purpose better.
Body: compare the two points

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eddies suggestion is very good. You find many IELTS essays on this forum and by reading them you can pick up good points and even different ways of expressing ideas. Also, don't forget to read the comments given by others too. They would provide you good insights :)