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Today, the health care system world is threatened by nurse migration



Dioba 68 / 97  
Sep 22, 2016   #1
IELTS Summary Task : Nurse Migration

Today, the health care systems world are threatens by nurse migration. This migration are caused by vary and complex problems. Higher salaries and better quality of life are some reasons why nurses moving from native country to wealthier countries. In some region especially developing nations such as South Asia and Latin America, the primarily reason for the shortage is nurse working abroad to meet demand needs in Europe and North America. The other case occurred in Philippines. They send thousands nurse working abroad and got income one billion dollar annually. The consequences of those policy is the Philippines feel the effects of the nursing shortage. Furthermore, the side effect of nurse migration is their leaving of health care up to assistant nurses, who have rudimentary training. Meanwhile, developed countries invest and focus on retaining and rewarding nurses, both financially and high-quality working conditions

Ifan21 22 / 12  
Sep 26, 2016   #2
Hey Dioba..
It is such a great essay .
These following correction are subjected to your essay :

Today, the world health care systems are threatened by nurse migration. it is caused by various and complex problems (pay attention to subject-verb agreement ).
... why nurses moving from nativetheir country to wealthier countries.
... abroad to meet demand needsrequirement in Europe and North America. The other cases occurred in Philippines ()it is not a sentece just consist of Subbejec Past participle (V-ed forma without to be are not verb but rather adj) . They send thousands nurses working abroad and ...

The consequences of those policyiesis are the Philippines feel ...
Furthermore, the side effect (spesify bad/good) of nurse migration is their ...

Note:
Pay attention to subject-verb agreement, the main idea of sentece, how and how to create the complex sentence correctly

Thanks
Best regard
Ifan


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