Your health depends on where you live - from the TED summary

At the beginning of the talks, Bill Davenhall, a Health and Human Services Expert talked about his experience in a hospital in an intensive-care ward because of heart attack. And sharing about formula for life and good health. There are several factors such as genetics, lifestyle and environment which potentially risk to our health. Environment is the factor which people doesn't realize that has potential risk. For instance, there are many vehicles in the big city that produces a lot of toxic in the air, like carbon dioxide. Moreover, for people who work in oil company which located in oil refinery area. It is produce an extremely toxic, such as methane gas. Based on those cases, so he decided to make a healthcare system called geomedicine that contain information about place history record and geographic information which is useful for future doctor to get patient medical record.

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