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Is a healthy meal a key factor for children to learn effectively? Who is in charge of this meal?



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Apr 1, 2023   #1

HEALTHY FOOD for learning effectiveness rise



Most people assume that educating children is the utmost affair that both the authority and citizens give attention to the most and the key factor to achieve that is providing high-qualified meals for them. I totally agree with this statement and I believe the school takes an integral part of being in charge about the good meals that they give to students.

A healthy meal includes all the chemical elements that a body in the period of developing need to have such as protein, good lipids, carbohydrates, vitamins and all kinds of vital micronutrients with a balanced quantity. These things take part in supporting enough nutrious and natural ingredients for stimulating the multiplying cells processes to nurture and grow their own bodies quickly. Moreover, these substances support the thinking of children developing and being deeper. Therefore, children are able to absorb knowledge more comfortably in a short time. It is evident that more books on the topic of nutrients for infants and how organic food affects children's brain and health of professionals have been produced and sold out with an amazing revenue.

On the other hand, to make a nutritious meal for pupils, the school is in directly charge of ensuring hygiene in the dishes. If the cooking part of the school gives students dishes which are made from spoiled ingredients or vegetables covering too much pesticides, the students can get poisonous and even it will greatly affect their lives.

In conclusion, I believe that healthy meals are crucial to children's health and their learning progress, therefore, the school should carefully consider and take the quality of students' dishes into account.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15443  
Apr 5, 2023   #2
There are several problems with the overall presentation that show a slight misunderstanding of the original writing instructions as provided for the prompt. The first mistake, is that the writer is not responding to the question about how true the statement is. When asked how true a certain declaration is, the writer is not expected to respond with an agree or disagree response. That is because the question requires a measured answer instead along the lines of , "I believe that this statement is true." Since the writing question can be answered with a true or false choice. The question about who is in charge of the meal was given a proper response though, owing to how the responsibility for the meals was given to the schools as a part of the topic restatement. So the first paragraph is not totally accurate, but not inaccurate either.

The first reasoning paragraph is unrelated to the discussion topic. The explanation in this section should have covered the reasons why schools are in charge of at least one healthy meal in a day for the students they teach. While the response is academic in nature and explanation, it is not aligned with the discussion focus of the original prompt.

In relation to why the school is in charge and how it affects students, the response is overly exaggerated and does not really explain the responsibility of the school when it comes to feeding the children. It is not properly explained nor developed beyond an exaggerated statement presentation.

Problems like these have a direct effect on the score of the student. While the grammar is mostly correct and the sentences are easy to understand, it is the lack of proper discussion coverage that will prove to be the scoring problem for the presentation.


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