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Horizontal city or vertical city



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Jul 27, 2023   #1
[IELTS Writing Task 2]
Some people think that it is best to live in a horizontal city while others think of a vertical city.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.



In this day and age, there has been an ongoing debate over which is the superior urban planning, horizontal or vertical cities. From a personal perspective, I am inclined to side with living in a city which is developed upwards, although the other school of design may benefit the residents in specific aspects as well.

To commence, proponents of low-rise housing ground their argument in the merit of safety and freedom. Firstly, detached houses are generally safer than high-rise apartments due to the basic nature of each structure, which facilitates the escape from the buildings or victim-seeking process when a fire occurs. Meanwhile, in terms of sky-high constructions, fighting fire is such a daunting task considering not all buildings offer an effective evacuation plan or sufficient escape routes. Moreover, some mega-structures are vulnerable to natural incidents and may not be able to withstand earthquakes and hurricanes, jeopardizing the lives of occupants and causing irreversible damage to the neighboring region. The earthquake striking Turkey in February is a salient example, which led to the mortalities of over 20,000 people and the collapse of thousands of high-rises0. Additionally, the spread-out nature of horizontal cities with low population density can provide residents with more access to green and open spaces for communality and a reduced frequency of congestion. Nevertheless, the sprawl of such cities can lead to the loss of natural and agricultural land as forests and pastures are eliminated to make room for housing erection.

In contrast, the cities that are vertically expanded can effectively address the natural resource depletion by combining recreational parks or shopping malls as built-in amenities, not to mention other amusement services in the proximity, hence enhancing convenience and amounting to increased economic productivity. Furthermore, the context of exponential increase in population and housing shortage can be a driving force behind the extravagant cost of land and construction for low-rises, let alone the recurring maintenance expenses, which heighten the financial burden for the majority. Therefore, I believe that growing municipalities upwards is a more viable approach since it can maximize land use efficiency, accommodating significantly more inhabitants compared to the same footprint of low-rise buildings.

In conclusion, while there are considerable advantages regarding the security and open space of horizontal cities, I would advocate for the vertically living arrangement seeing that it can help cope with overpopulation and resource exhaustion, which are some of humankind's most pressing challenges.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15936  
Aug 4, 2023   #2
You have written 400 words in an essay that failed to meet the discussion requirements and word maximum usage of 300 words. You will not be able to finish writing an essay of this length during an actual test. Not within 40 minutes. You need to work on expressing yourself quickly. Use good examples, but do not over rely on just discussing examples to complete the task. You must present only 1 example for each point of view, which you must explain thoroughly to the reader. You will not be scored on the number of examples and information length. Your score will be based upon how well you can use the examples to prove your point to the reader. Short, clear, and informative, that is the aim of the discussion paragraphs in a task 2 essay.


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