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IELST TASK 2 : living in small community creates a wide range communication


faarasyad 7 / 15 7  
May 7, 2015   #1
In the past, most people lived in small villages where everyone knew everyone else. Nowadays, most people live in large cities where they only know a few people in their area.

what do you think were the advantages and disadvantages of living in a small community?


These days, some people live in big cities where they have just a little communication with others, whilst in the past, people who lived in the small villages communicated with every person in their area. Therefore, I would argue that the benefits of this trend outweigh the drawbacks.

On the positive side, people living in small community are easy to remember each other. This is because the number of people is not as much as in big cities, so they may be able to interact well with everyone in their regions. For instance, when there is a disaster in the village, the chief can recognize the citizens to be evacuated from one area to another area by checking his inhabitant lists. Therefore, the small community creates people to be solid one another. In addition, citizens can have a good cooperation with others such cleaning village together.

However, a negative side in the small community is that the citizens will keep away from the other people outside their community. For example, when there is a visitor comes to their area, the local people usually prevent to make an interaction because visitors may be able to bring different culture from other regions, so the genuine culture in the small community decreases gradually. Consequently, it is hard for the people to update their information such as technology communication, medicine when it comes to living in the countryside.

To sum up, although there is a drawback of living in small community, it is evident that people are closer one another by having a good cooperation and kinship relationship in the same area.

IqbalThemi 44 / 46 13  
May 8, 2015   #2
I think you need to rewrite your introduction.

Please, attention to your task. it is better for you to mention what the advantages and disadvantages are like the task want.


These days, some people live in big cities where they have just a little communication with others, whilst in the past, people who lived in the small villages communicated with every person in their area. Therefore, I would argue that the benefits of this trend outweigh the drawbacks.

Let's me try,
In the past, most people lived in small villages where everyone knew everyone else. Nowadays, most people live in large cities where they only know a few people in their area.

Living communities play an important role in people's live. For this reason, people in the past are really keen on living in the small pretty villages which make them to know each others. However, many people today prefer to live in the large industrial cities with limited neighborhood around their environment. I strongly believe that the chance to take much more money and to find great schools for children are key factors which encourage people to move to cities, whilst less opportunity in work and unhealthy crowded environment will be drawbacks for them.
hunhann 6 / 23  
May 10, 2015   #3
If you fix it as above
ur essay will be really well-written
u r writing to argue the negative side
so u should write more about the disadvantages and supporting sentences, shorten ur ex with clear state
the positive is against ur ideas, that's why u had better only list them instead of doing it clear and enough strong over to the other side

hope this helps
good luck


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