IETLS; Should government spend money on preserving language? YES

Hi everyone, I am new here, and I am going to take the Ielts exam in a month, really appreciated if some one could help me here with my essay thanks a lot.

Topic:

Some people believe government should spend money on measures of language with few people from dying out completely, others think this is a waste of financial resources. Discuss both views and give your position.

Today, many languages are disappearing for various reasons. Some people think that governments should spend money to protect these languages from dying out while others think doing so would be a waste of money. Both sides will be analysed in this essay.

It is believed by some that a culture is reflected by its language, to which government should allocate some of its revenue for protection. For example, Australian government established a budget to preserve Aboriginal culture and particularly language. By doing this, the government makes a major contribution in preventing the extinction of one of the world`s oldest cultures. Therefore, the benefits of government involvement in rescuing endangered language can be seen.

However, others argue that protecting unpracticed languages is futile. For instance, the disappearance of dialects unavoidably occurs every day due to the acceleration of globalization. Thus, it is absurd for governments to throw so much money into the black-hole when elsewhere such as education and medication demands more attention. This makes clear why many are of the opinion that authority spending is better exercised in vital areas.

After analysed both opinions, it seems to me that it is necessary to reserve part of government`s income in preserving endangered languages. It is recommended that governments should not only spend money on this preservation but also organise relating events to encourage more people to contribute this cause.

Some people think that governments should spend money to protect the dying dialects of small communities while others think it is a waste of money.


.... both sides and both opinions are the same.
This essay aims at analyzing both these views.


.... why don't you use direct speech more? It can present your ideas with better clarity;
Some people view that government should allocate adequate funds from the budget to prevent these languages from extinction. They feel that these languages represent the culture and values of those small communities that deserve to be protected and passed down to future generations.

thank you very much for your help, my aim is score 7, so in your opinion, in what aspects i should pay the most of attention on , ^_^

.... It's good if you had separated this sentence into a few for each idea. For example;
The people who believe that government should allocate funds in order to protect languages of small and insignificant communities, claim that it is a necessary measure to preserve their culture for their next generations. The reason is that language is the base of any culture and without existence of a language, it is difficult to have its culture survived.

... very good example!
Good writing and good luck!

It's a good essay with clear ideas, structure and conclusion.
But in my opinion, you should present your opinion in the introduction paragraph, which makes readers follow your ideas easily and gives us a hint about what you going to say.

... excellent :)


.... very good sentence with lots of sense. But, I wish you slightly change the end;
It is believed by some that a culture is reflected by its language, to which the government should allocate some of its revenue for preserving it for the next generations.

It's much better than your first version. Anyways... you write very well and wish you good luck!