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ILETS: Should Crime be penalized with fixed or variable sentences ?



zoha 8 / 19  
Jul 28, 2013   #1
Should crime be penalized with fixed or variable sentences keeping all the facts under consideration ? People differ in their views. Please discuss both views and give your opinion.

It has been observed that crime rate is on rise unprecedentedly. Each unlawful activity is unique in its nature and context. Community differ in its opinion how legislation should be enforced in sentencing the offenders. One view favors standard punishment for everyone who break a certain law. Others contend to consider all details including motives before sentencing the felons. As both point of view have merits, I would discuss them individually before stating my position.

Historically, judicial system has set a unchangeable penalty for individual criminal acts regardless of the situation of their occurrence. It makes legal matters to resolve smoothly without undue delay and injustice. Furthermore, these fixed sentences convey a strong message to all potential lawbreaker that they would be prosecuted without any leniency.For example, capital punishment is for everyone who is guilty of murdering other humankind. So, previously defined penalization ensure unbiased trial for all criminals regardless of their intentions.

Some people are convinced that folks are involved in lawless acts for diverse reasons. Many become culprit unintentionally just to survive. Sometimes, financially handicapped personnel steal food from grocery store as a last resort. Some others are forced to disrupt peace over life threats or misguided information. Individuals with this view maintain that legal system should consider all the circumstances surrounding each lawlessness and disciplined accordingly.

Judiciary should review each wrongful activity keeping all facts that lead to this illegitimate act under consideration before sentencing per my view. It does not make sense to prosecute with equal penalty and fine a thief who takes food unlawfully from a food chain to feed his or her hungry children and a burglar who steal jewelery form a business.It would be unfair to send them in a prison with the same jail terms.

To summarize, community is spilt on formulating laws for illegals whether to punish them equally or appropriately considering all related situations and intentions. I believe legislation should be focused on individual context not predetermined penalty for a crime.

gmad06 20 / 143  
Jul 29, 2013   #2
I would discuss them individually before stating my position.

Its either you state your position in the introduction or you remove this statement.

It makes legal matters to resolve smoothly without undue delay and injustice

Legal matters are smoothly resolved without injustice and delay.

Your essay structure is good, grammatical errors are pretty much acceptable, and your ideas are clearly presented.
If you were able to write this in 35 minutes or lesser, then I believe you are ready to sit for the exams.

hope this helps...
OP zoha 8 / 19  
Jul 29, 2013   #3
Thank you for the excellent suggestion. I have just started preparing for ILETS. I could type faster than handwriting. ILETS is still pencil and paper based at the place I live. Anyways , please feel free to express your input if need to.
dumi 1 / 6793  
Jul 30, 2013   #4
t has been observed that crime rate is on the rise unprecedentedly

Community differs in its opinion how legislation should be enforced in sentencing the offenders

.... tell this with direct speech. That is more apealing to the reader :)
Different countries enforce different sentences with regard to committing crimes.
[quote=zoha] both point of views [ /quote]
Pay attention to grammar.
OP zoha 8 / 19  
Jul 30, 2013   #5
Thank you for the feedback. Where can I get help/feedback regarding grammar ? Please advise.
jkjeremy - / 380  
Jul 30, 2013   #6
This is a little like asking, "Where can I get feedback regarding happiness?"

Search online for the phrase "basic English grammar errors." That's probably as good a place to start as any.

However, becoming fluent in any foreign language---especially in its written form---requires years of exposure.

Start watching American television, listening to American talk radio, and reading modern American nonfiction.
tiendh 3 / 4  
Jul 30, 2013   #7
To summarize, community is spilt on formulating laws for illegals whether to punish them equally or appropriately considering all related situations and intentions. I believe legislation should be focused on individual context not predetermined penalty for a crime.
OP zoha 8 / 19  
Jul 31, 2013   #8
Thank you for the guidance. Appreciated.
Dan0912 2 / 2  
Jul 31, 2013   #9
"Some others are forced to disrupt peace over life threats or misguided information"

the grammar error should be amended.

quite clear your structure is .
OP zoha 8 / 19  
Aug 1, 2013   #10
Dan0912

Could you please identify the grammar mistake please ? Thank you.


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