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Essay about improving standard of living through economic development..



suri2018 1 / -  
Jun 5, 2020   #1

Boosting productivity and living standards



Concerning the issue of economic development, people hold different views. An army of people consider that economic growth helps standard of living to impro while others claim social value is lost as a result. This essay will discuss both views from multi aspects.

First of all, I would like to mention about the benefits of expansation of economy. Facts indicate, economic boosting creates work for people to fufil their consumption and upgrade living standard. Moreover, it bring money to national budget. Hence, goverment has foundation to improve infrastructure such as hospital, school, road system to chang the ouut look of a country and meet the demand of citizens better. In addition, it supplies the plat form for other fields. For example : It helps invest in science and technology to invent new machines to modernize the society.

Nonetheless, It is undeniabe that short comings of economic development need pondering. We should consider pollution of air and environment. For example : People exploit natuural resources and release a huge amount of garbage, exhaust gas to serve production. Besides, the more society develops, the busier people are. People pay attention to livelihood and they do not care about others such as neighborship or familyu sentiment.

In conclusion, for all reasons mentioned aboved, it can be affirmed that economic development is an inevitable result of modern society. However, each person should live a positive life style and balance time for work and family.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15347  
Jun 6, 2020   #2
Your essay will definitely receive notable percentage deductions due to the 10 missing words that would have allowed you meet the minimum 250 word requirement. Please remember that you have to meet the minimum word count so that your essay can receive proper scoring assessments for each criteria. Writing within the 275-290 word count is the ideal essay presentation. It will allow you to better present your writing skills based on the scoring considerations.

Without the full and correct prompt, I cannot assess the content of your essay in terms of response requirements and proper response formatting. I find myself confused as to what the proper response approach would be for this discussion. That is something that becomes clear to me when I know the actual prompt. It will also allow me to give you the correct improvement suggestions for your writing shortcomings. Please remember to do that next time.

As for some problems I found in your essay:

Spelling:
aboved - above
expansation - expansion
fufil - fulfill
goverment - government
chang- change
ouut - out
undeniabe - undeniable
natuural - natural
familyu - family

Word usage:
life style - lifestyle
bring - brings
out look - outlook

Writing Rules:
Do not capitalize the letter I unless used in first person pronoun form in a sentence or, when used to indicate a proper noun

These are the errors that I noticed in your essay. I did not look into your presentation as, like I previously indicated, the essay does not meet the minimum word count so it will have points deductions for that, along with other deductions, per scoring consideration, based on the scoring criteria. It is not going to achieve a passing score anyway.


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