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Every individual, regardless of his gender should get a chance to study at university level.


mithsal 3 / 4  
May 13, 2011   #1
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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?


Knowledge is critical to our future as it has been critical to our past. It is necassary that people get themselves educated to build individual capacitythat could make their countries country of opportunity.

Every individual,regardless of their gender should get a chance to study at university level.Nowadays, females work side by side with males and they have a right to get an equal opportunity to study with them but in order to be meritorious universities should aceept students on merit basis rather than keeping a fixed seats of equivalent numbers of male and female students.Every student possess a different quality and a set standard to meet their expectations. By accepting students on merit basis, the university offers them to give their best in their field of interest. This inturn will produce capable students who will look up to the future with confidence. On the contrary, if equal numbers of both genders are accepted in every subject then those who are less interested will not be able to bring out their talent or work upto their maximum potential. As a result, university willl face difficulty and the set standards wont be met.

To conclude, my opinion suggests that universities should accept students on merit basis rather than taking equal number of male and female students.

please correct my essay. Thank you:)
dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
May 15, 2011   #2
Hi,

It is necassary that people get themselves educated to build individual capacity (space) that could make their countries country of opportunity .------------- The end of this sentence seem to confuse the reader. Are you trying to say;

Education is important for the people to build their individual capacity which would create many opportunities for their countries
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Every individual,regardless of their gender should get a chance to study at university levelpursue a tertiary education if they are competent enough and have a desire to do so.(I added the latter part because not everyone is capable of pursuing higher education)

Nowadays, females work side by side with males and they have a right to get an equal opportunity to study with them but in order to be meritorious universities should aceeptaccept students on merit basis rather than keeping a fixed seats of equivalent numbers of male and female students.------------------ this sentence is too long and therefore fails to convey your idea clearly. I give you the following suggestion in which I have added the reason why you think that universities should accept candidates on merit basis;

Nowadays, females work side by side with their male counterparts. Therefore, there is no doubt that they deserve equal opportunities in education. However, the objective of university education is to create scholars with specialized knowledge in their respective diciplines. Therefore if universities accept students on a quota basis in order to have equal gender representation, they may fail to achieve this prime objective due to the fact that students may lack the required capacity or the potential to follow such advanced courses.


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