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Essay about an industrial area in the town of Norbiton with maps



aether 1 / -  
May 31, 2023   #1

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.


Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.


The given maps portrays the present of an industrial area located in Norbiton town and its redevelopment plan.
Overall, it can be seen that the town will be markedly different by various changes. More clearly, this is due to the extension in streets and the rebuilding of factories.

To begin with, the north the roundabout will witness a new path going through the river of the map and there will be dwelling places along the left side and the end of the road. Following that, the path on Eastern are planing to be surrounded with accomodation, a school at the cessation and a playground with a path at the upper middle.

Turn to the remaining parts, another new path will be built in the southwest direction of the traffic circle with housing on the upper side and at the end of the path. Subsequently, there will be new shops and medical centre in the southwestern and southeastern, respectively around the roundabout. Eventually, a new smaller rotary will appear in the future below the available one


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Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15461  
May 31, 2023   #2
The summary overview is a bit incomplete. You must identify the image as the present "layout" of the industrial area. That simple missing word actually created an incoherent sentence, which would have negatively affected your C+C score.

The description in the essay should have been representative of the current layout of the town and the future layout. One paragraph per map. That should have been done since you were being asked to compare the drawing. While you did a comparison in the trending statement, it should have been more comprehensive in the reporting paragraphs.

Due to the incomplete descriptions, the essay may find it difficult to get a passing score. The examiner expects to read a complete report, not an imbalanced descriptive essay.


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