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An info - how long it took to go arround the city before and after the transport was improved


dinartika19 37 / 67 6  
Aug 15, 2016   #1
The table and bar chart show how journey times in a city centre changed after improvements were made to the transport network, and the costs of using different forms of transport in the city.

Sumarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.


The graph shows how long it took to go arround the city before and after the transport network was improved. The bar chart tell how much it costs to use different type of the transport in the capital.

Taxi was the fastest vehicle before and after the upgrade. The other hand, tram took less tim than bus journey just about four minutes differences, but after the improvement it turned out six minutes different . Tram still served faster than before. The cheapest one to have a trip was by bus, it was around 0.40 poundsterling so that it made a big gap between bus and taxi, and it is very useful for backpacker who needed cheaper accommodation. The other alternative for rambler was tram, because the price was cheaper than taxi, although higher than bus. For others who need luxury they can use taxi as their choice.


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akbarmappiare 31 / 469 275  
Aug 16, 2016   #2
Hi Atikah..
In this writing, you have presented the big problem. You will get a penalty for your score when you conduct the test. It is because you write less than 150 words. Please, you strive and fight your obstacle. I hope you do not commit the same matter.


The graph shows how long it took to go arround AROUND the city before and after ...
ON THE OTHER HAND, (YOU NEED A TRANSITIVE WORD SO THAT YOUR TOPIC DOES NOT JUMP DIRECTLY) The bar chart tell DISPLAYS how much it costs to use different typeS of the transport ...

Taxi was IS the fastest vehicle ...
ONE The other hand, THE tram took less tim TIME than THE bus journey (...) but after the improvement DEVELOPING it turned out six minutes different . THE Tram still served faster than before.

... it was around 0.40 poundS sterling so that it made (...) very useful for backpacker A TOURIST who needed cheaper accommodation. The other alternative for rambler was IS THE tram, (...) cheaper than THE taxi, although higher than THE bus.


Note:
If This writing is measured, you will get the low score. I have found a large number of mistakes grammatically. However, I personally believe you only need more time to practice. You have to strive to achieve the task respond of writing indicators. Besides that, you should review my suggestions previously as you fall the same problem. I will underline the lessons which you should learn.

1. Verb Agreement
2. Use of the article (A/ An/The)
3. Harnessing the transitive words.
4 Comparing the figures of the writing task 1
5. Determining the general trend written in the first paragraph.

In fact, you will need much time to write in the first week. However, you will master that in more and more days. You struggle and deal with your problems.Trust me, you will be competence in this skill if you have a strong desire to practice every day.

Keep spirit.
^_^


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