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Information about international visitor advents in five regions in the world



Anna94 47 / 50  
Nov 20, 2016   #1
International Tourist Arrivals in Five Countries

A breakdown of information about international visitor advents in five regions in the world is given by the line chart from 1995 to 2005. The measurement unit is in millions. Overall, all countries had an upward trend except USA. However, USA was the most country where was visited by tourists during the period.

To start with, from 1995 to 2005, all countries experienced an upward trend. Egypt stood at the lowest number in the beginning. It was followed by Brazil in the slight difference figure. However, ten years later witnessed a gradual rise of Egypt at more than 10, which overtook the position of Brazil at 10. Malaysia, France, and USA increased gradually until they reached a peak at 30, 70 and 90 respectively in 2005.

After a culmination of three countries in 2005 and an inclining of others, four countries continued a steady climb until 2010. Brazil, Egypt, Malaysia and France reached a high point at that last year at just above 10, around 15, 40, and 85 respectively. Unfortunately, USA declined slightly at the same number of France. Nevertheless, USA was still the highest number of visitor arrivals in all countries. 194w


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ifraanisa05 44 / 67  
Nov 20, 2016   #2
Hi Anna, here is my thoughts

... an upward trend except theUSA.
to reduce the using of verb auxiliary, maybe you can change had into experienced/witnessed/gained/..

However, the USA was the most country where was visited by ...
you can reduce the conjunction to boost your skill in writing

... witnessed a gradual rise ofin Egypt at more than 10
the proper collocation rise --> in

Malaysia, France, and the USA increased gradually ...
avoid using data three times. sounds like shopping list

keep writing Anna :)


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