TASK 1: information on the percentage of people who were unemployed in the US and Japan

Unemployment rates: usa and Japan

The line graph provides information on the percentage of people who were unemployed in the US and Japan from March 1993 to March 1999.
It can be seen from the graph that the US and Japan followed the opposite pattern between 1993 and 1999. At the beginning, while US had the highest figure for the percentage of people who didn't have a job, Japan started at the lowest point.

Getting into the details, in 1993, in spite of more unemployed workers in the US than in Japan, with 7% and 2.5% respectively, two countries both ended with around 5% in 1999. With regard to the US, the unemployment rate decreased significantly from 1993 to 1996, and then fluctuated mildly around 5% until the end of the period. On the contrary, Japan's percentage of the unemployed witnessed a considerable growth of 2.5% and reached a peak at roughly 5.5% in March 1998.

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I do not feel that you have written enough words to justify your English writing skills. Writing only 151 words means you only wanted to meet the minimum word requirement. It does not mean that you tried to showcase your writing skills in any way. So your limited written presentation will also result in a limited scoring potential for your essay. That means, your score will only be passing at the most. However, since you have clarity and conciseness issues, you may not even achieve the passing band score. Next time, aim for the better scoring word count of 175-190 words. Try to highlight your potential in reporting data whenever possible.

This is a 3 paragraph format essay. You only have 2 paragraphs presented. You have failed to properly compare data points in your essay, There was a specific failure on your part to compare the overlapping data in from the line graph pertaining to unemployment rates in March 98 and 99. You must make sure to review the information in a manner where you can spot and report on the meeting points of the information provided.