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The information on the proportion of the entire population of the world over 100 years



RosePham 1 / -  
Jun 1, 2021   #1

Essay about the percentage of total of world population



The bar chart gives information on the proportion of the entire population of the world in a long period of 100 years from 1950 to 2050.

Overall, it is noticeable that the proportion of the population of three countries respectively China, USA, and Japan have decreased whilst India has increased for over the period. Another striking feature is that the percentage of the population of China is the highest of the four countries.

As is shown, the highest percentage of the population in China can be observed at the beginning of the period, accounted for 23% while at the same time, Japan started at roughly 4%. In the following period, in 2002, China and Japan had a slight decline to 20% and 3%, respectively. In 2050, it has been predicted that the proportion of the population of two countries China and Japan will continue decreasing even shows a dramatically downward trend at 25% and approximately 2%, respectively.

In India and the USA, at the beginning of the period, there were 15% and roughly 7% of the population, respectively. The next time, India showed a slight increase of the population about 2% in contrast to America, the percentage declined slightly to 5%. In 2050, it has been predicted that the proportion of the population of India will continue to increase by approximately 2% while this is unchanged in the USA.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15458  
Jun 2, 2021   #2
You need to learn how to better develop and present your sentence ideas per paragraph. Your sentences are understandable, but lack proper punctuation that can help your writing be easier and better understood. Your sentences need pause points for clarity. Pause points are represented by comma, period, and other punctuation marks as dividing points for topics or thoughts within the sentences and paragraphs. Avoid using combined idea sentences to help determine the proper pause insertion points. Write short, rather than long sentences. Pay attention to your word usage. You won't increase your LR score by writing long passages using words that don't really help with the quick comprehension of your sentences.

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