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Integrity of family - Fatherhood ought to be emphasised as much as motherhood.



sheikhnabeel 2 / 4  
May 16, 2012   #1
Fatherhood ought to be emphasised as much as motherhood...

Please help me on this. I want to know where I stand. Kindly review. Any help in this regard will be great. Thanks.

Father has been idealized as the bread earner of the family and mothers role is restricted to taking care of children and home. The decision of having baby is the mutual responsibility of husband and wife. It will be unfair to put the burden of shared responsibility just on the mother. Father is equally responsible as mother is for taking care of their children.

Father role cannot be negated from bringing up his children. He is the one who should provide enough support to his family so that his children could get best of the healthcare, food, education, shelter and eventually a life full of happiness. Where as mother makes sure that her baby is trained well and makes him/her a person who is aware of his/her social and moral duties.

No religion in a world dictates this kind of approach. It's a natural phenomena, If a father backs out of his responsibilities, than its the mother who had to make sure of bread and butter for her self and children and also take care of child in what ever situation she is in. The whole family idea get lost in this approach. It will have a negative impact on child mind as well. There are certain things which father can only teach his children and on of them is how to face the society. These kind of children are most of the time are found to be not confident. Also, depression creeps in slowly. The results are dangerous in long term.

The father and mother are the integral part of family. If one of them decides to quit than its their generation that has to see the worst. The fatherhood and motherhood both role should be emphasized and its the the only way forward.

jhundais 4 / 5  
May 17, 2012   #2
I'd like to help but I am having difficulties understanding the prompt. It seems too vague for me.

Are you sure you pasted the full prompt? What are the instructions?

Anyway, I got lost while reading your essay. You did not state your position clearly both in the introduction and the conclusion.

I do not get what kind of message you are trying to convey.

I think you need to reformulate your thesis statement and take it from there.
OP sheikhnabeel 2 / 4  
May 17, 2012   #3
Dear, Thanks for your reply. Its having the following context on which I have written

"Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up."

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

What should I do?


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