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International experience and more precious opportunity. Statement of Purpose For Enrollment at KAUST



aniani 20 / 19  
Dec 13, 2015   #1
Statement of Purpose: Please compose a statement of purpose (maximum of 750 words) discussing the following three points equally:
1. Past work and preparation in your intended field of study.
2. Academic plans for your graduate study and research at KAUST.
3. How will your experience as a KAUST graduate student further your career plans immediately following graduation, and beyond?


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Living in a developing country, such as Indonesia, facing decline in shipping industry is a huge motivation for me to find out solutions to this problem. I am motivated to study abroad in order to broaden my international outlook while simultaneously strengthening my professional abilities. I am especially eager to become acquainted and learn more about thermodynamics, fluid mechanics, heat and mass transfer, and sustainable energy engineering; from the general appearance to the smallest detail. By collaborating with students and instructors from different backgrounds and international society, such as that in your university is ideal for gaining inspiration and acquiring sound training. My decision to study mechanical engineering is encouraged by a desire to contribute to the development of my country's industry in the future.

I earned my BEng from Naval Architecture and Marine Engineering, Department of Mechanical Engineering at University of Indonesia. This course of study gave me thorough foundation of knowledge in ship designing and its calculation. In my spare time, I participated in several seminars involving ship design and marine construction. Moreover, I attended several training to attain certification in marine engineering. The classes I took gave me comprehension in the basic theory of mechanical engineering, and I was fortunate to study in a program that was forward thinking, with lecturers who always pushed me to look to the future. In this environment, I was also surrounded by highly motivated and visionary students, who challenged me to get the best of my ability.

In the university, the coursework focused on theoretical aspects rather than practical aspect. Therefore, to gain practical experience, I had an internship program in Biro Klasifikasi Indonesia Company in my sixth semester. In this company, I significantly increased my knowledge of ship design, such us ship stability, construction, machinery, and safety. As I considered my options for postgraduate studies, the Master of Engineering in Mechanical Engineering at King Abdullah University of Science and Technology has stood out for a number of reasons. The interdisciplinary nature of the program is especially attractive to me, as this will give me a much broader, more practical understanding of all aspects of mechanical field. In addition, the hands-on focus of the program and the links to industry will prepare me to long-term success. With the inherently international nature of today's mechanical industry. It is important for me to study in an international environment away from my country and will certainly give me a unique advantage in my career pursuits.

Supporting this, while I study at KAUST, I tend to learn deeply about fluid mechanics and thermodynamics which is related to my previous study, marine engineering. I will do a research and take some cases from my country as a maritime country. While studying there, this also delivers some advantages for other students since they can obtain worthy experience from it.

After completing my master's degree, I expect to apply what I have learned to drive the shipping industry forward and thus benefit people and society as a whole. I will return to my native country and seek work in the rapidly developing marine and shipping industry, where this is currently a strong demand for talented, experienced communication engineers, and especially ones with international experience. By working in this context, I am confident that I can distinguish myself as a leader in my profession and make many valuable contributions to the modernization of my country. This is a very exciting time to be working in the marine industry, as technology is evolving quickly and new applications are being devised constantly. If I can work at the cutting edge of this industry, I know that I will have a career that is enriching, meaningful, and rewarding in the long term.

In conclusion, I am really excited starting study at KAUST due to gaining international experience and more precious opportunity. Thank you for taking my application into account.

HoangVNguyen 1 / 2  
Dec 13, 2015   #2
Minor mistakes:
Paragraph 3, line 3 - typo: I think you meant "such as ship stability", not "such us ship stability".
Paragraph 3, line 7 - sentence fragment: "With the inherently international nature of today's mechanical industry. It is important for me..." should be "With the inherently international nature of today's mechanical industry, it is important for me..."

Paragraph 4, line 2 - adverbial disagreement: "While studying there, this also delivers some advantages for other students since they can obtain worthy experience from it." should be "While I study there, this also delivers some advantages for other students since they can obtain worthy experience from it.

On the whole, the essay struck me as a well-written one. You have clearly answered the prompts. Good job :)
vangiespen - / 4077  
Dec 13, 2015   #3
Ani, I polished your essay and applied improvements to make it even better and more interesting to read. This is ready to use as is should you choose to do so. It is now 534 words.

I am motivated to study abroad in order to broaden my international outlook ...
vangiespen - / 4077  
Dec 14, 2015   #4
Hi Ani, I believe that this essay already has all the elements that make it a very good statement of purpose. All of the criteria have been represented and thoroughly discussed. Try to review the essay one more time before submission in case you forgot to mention something important. From my point of view, you have accomplished what you have set out to do. That is, you have presented the best credentials that you have to bolster your application.

While the essay runs a bit longer than normally expected, I can understand that there are certain points that you don't want to leave out because you believe it will enhance your application. So I will leave those parts in as a courtesy to you. I am also sure that the reviewer will see its relevance once he considers the overall content of your statement. Don't worry anymore at this point. The essay is ready for submission and consideration. I am sure it is strong enough to make you a contender for acceptance into the program.

Good luck with your application ! Let us know how it goes for you :-) We wish you the best.


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