why practicality is indispensable
Is this your personal point of view ? If yes, then frame it as such. Respond as required by the prompt. The aforementioned presentation does not deliver in the expected format. You will lose points based on an improper response presentation.
I believe that giving advice and practical aid should be underscored.
This is the clear opinion that should be in the first paragraph. This cannot be used as a concluding statement. Presenting your opinion at the end this way will result in a failing overall score.
The response format in terms of discussion paragraphs needs work. you have to justify the belief of the 2 public sides in individual paragraphs first. Answer the question "Why are their beliefs correct" before you offer your own opinion.