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lequangninh 1 / 3  
Dec 18, 2013   #1
Please correct my answer for 5 questions of speaking test.

Question 1 : Tell me about your family ?

Answer : Well first of all , the main thing you need to know is that I come from a small family with four members.They are my parents , my elder brother and me.My father is a supervisor in VN air catering company at the Tan Son Nhat airport.As for my mother , My mom is a housewife.In addition to,she also has small grocery store.At last , my brother is a computer programmer and was born three years before me.On top of that I can also add that we often gather together to have a happy meal , talk , discuss about our work, our current life and future plan.In fact , my small family always make me feel relax and comfortable in the moment.Something else that I need to comment on is that my family is a very happy one.So actually , we love each other and expect to live together under the same roof forever. [..]

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Dec 18, 2013   #2
I noticed that the beginning of every answer seems annoyitng if these answers all are answered at the same time. It's just repeating the beginning again and again. If these questions are not going to be answered at the same time. Then i think the beginning sentence is okay :)
OP lequangninh 1 / 3  
Dec 18, 2013   #3
Thank you for your advice..^_^..
Yep , I can change the beginning of every answer. But I concern the ideas in this essay.
Can you give me some advice about ideas of essay ?
FrankZheng 3 / 14  
Dec 18, 2013   #4
I hope that these suggestions can help you.

Question 1 : Tell me about your family ?
Answer : Well, first of all , the main thing you need to know is that I come from a small family with four members.They are , my parents , my elder brother and me. My father is a supervisor in VN air catering company at the Tan Son Nhat airport. As for and my mother , My mom she is a housewife.In addition to ,she also run a small grocery store.At last , my brother is a computer programmer and was born three years before older than me.

On top of that I can also add that we often gather together to have a happy meal , talk , discussion about our work, our current life and future plans .In fact , my small family always make me feel relaxed and comfortable inat the moment.Something else that I need to comment on is thatAlso, my family is a very happy one.So actually ,because we love each other and expect towill live together under the same roof forever. By the way ,I don't think your ideas is interesting. Do you believe that you will live in one house forever?

Question 2 : Tell me about your house ?
Answer : Well first of all , the main thing you need to know is that My house is in a noisy areadistrictnot far fromneara large main road in District twelve .On top of that I can also add that it is little small and made of bricks.There are three rooms in my house: they are the living room,the bedroom and the kitchen.Something else that I need to comment on is that All the rooms are nice and tidy.So actually, And the interior decoration and the furniture in my house are beautifull although they aren't expensive.

Question 3 : tell me about your hometown or your city?
Answer : I was born in Ha Nam province , but I have grown up in HCM city.So it can be said thatI am more comfortable to say that HCM city is my hometown.I suppose if I had to describe HCM city , the main thing you need to know is that It's a enormous city , maybe evenactually one of the biggest cities in Southeast Asia I guess.It's big and has many back alleys in fact that even the locals problems finding their way around.On the top of that I can also add that my city offers examples of both classical and contemporary architecture.Actually some of the Vietnam 's most renowned landmarks are "slap-bang" in the middle of HCM city.

Question 4 : Tell me about your study
Answer :Well first of all , the main thing you need to know is that I'm a student of the AFTC training center.At this center I study nine disciplines aboutin financial fields such as quantitative, financial reporting analysis, economic, corporate finance and so on .Besides studying at the AFTC training center , I'm attending Learning English course at small English center.On top of that I can also add that I'm always on the go.In fact , I have to get to the bottom of problems related to revise schoolwork and become skilled in English.

Question 5 : What makes you happy?
Well first of all , the main thing you need to know is thatAThe feeling of pleasure or enjoyment makes me happy. In fact that, most of my family's free time is spent inon talkint to each other about our current life, current work and future plans. That was one of the happiest moments of my life.On top of that I can also add that it is necessary to do useful sth for my life in order to have true happiness. So actually, when I get a sense of achievement from my work, those everyday actions give me more effort ? , more inspiration and more happiness.
Pahan 1 / 1824  
Dec 20, 2013   #5
Well, I find the first sentence is not adding any value to this response. Pleasure and enjoyment always deal with happiness and this whole idea is not giving any meaningful thought to the reader. I strongly suggest you to remove this sentence from this paragraph.

In fact that, most of my family's free time is spent in talking withto each other about our current life, current work and future planssharing our experiences, thoughts, and future plans.

That was one of the happiest moments of my life.

...Rather than saying this, it's better you tell them about your feelings and experiences when you have family moments together. That's a better way to have the reader impressed.


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