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IELTS essay - Is the re introduction of criminals in societies is justified?


SreeSam 12 / 38 7  
Jan 3, 2014   #1
Most criminals are set free once they finish their jail terms. Is the re introduction of criminals in societies is justified? Place your views in no less than 250 words.

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As the saying goes, 'To err is human to forgive is divine', every human should be given a second chance to accept his/her mistakes and realize it. Some argue that the criminals can mingle with the normal people after the tenure in lock-up and few deny stating that they should not be set free. I certainly agree with the fact of re-introducing them after their tenure in the prison to the community.

Apart few exceptions, every person in this world do accept their oversights and wishes to live with their family and relatives. In spite of realizing their mistakes and sufferings in the jail for about 10 or 15 years with mental agony, people are not been accepted by the external society.

Nowadays, the average lifetime of a human is even reduced to 50 years. For instance, if a criminal is been sentenced for about 15 years of confinement, more than a quarter of his lifetime is gone in repenting. Considering the facts, why do not we give them another chance to live in harmony with his family and relatives where time has the magical effect of healing.

We are not definitely worried about the culprits who do not repent for their destruction to the world. Few wait till they are set out and take revenge by creating communal clashes or through bomb blast. These kind of criminals should be under surveillance even in the prison for their day-to-day activities and should not be released.

Having said all these, when we forgive and add the person who is ready to be a Good Samaritan to the society then we will definitely have a good citizen to the nation.

Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Jan 3, 2014   #2
'To err is human to forgive is divine'

"To err is human, to forgive, divine" ... play attention to the punctuation changes I made. Very good beginning and you've quoted a great idiom :)

Some argue that the criminals can mingle with the normal people after the tenure in lock-up and few deny stating that they should not be set free.

... actually your prompt is not one that throws an argument and ask you to agree or disagree. It states an idea and ask your opinion about it. So, this section needs a little bit of change in its presentation;

In many countries, the criminals are set free once they serve their respective terms of imprisonment. However, some people have concerns as to whether re-introduction of criminals in societies is justifiable.
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Jan 3, 2014   #3
every person in this world do accept their oversights and wishes to live with their family and relatives.

I don't get your idea here :( What do you mean?
Also, your body paragraphs need to include specific examples to support your reasoning.


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