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'the invention of (mobile) phone has changed all' - technology and people interaction


kiwiuua 3 / 3  
Jan 23, 2012   #1
Firstly,thanks for your help in advance.

Topics: nowadays,the way many people interact with each other has changed bacause of technology.

In what ways has technology affected the affected the types of relationship people make?
Essay:
In modern society,with the development of the technology in many fields,the people's life has changed a lot. Especially in the communication, a great change has happened in contrast to the old means of communication.For example,when my grandpa was a child..If he wants to connect with their relatives who are far away from him.He can only write a letter.It spends long time for the relatives receiving the letter.In sometimes,many imporant information cannot be conveyed in time.

However,the invention of phone has changed all that.People around the world can connect with each other by phone.It brings great convenience for us to communicate with our relatives who are far away from us. We can also interact with our friends who are aboard..Meanwhile, Internet is another powerful tools for us to convey information timely.There are many communication tools on the internet.Such as,we can use msn to communicate with others without meeting them in the real world.It also makes us meet new friends around the world.Communicating becomes more and more facility with the help of technology.But,we cannot neglect the negative affect that the development technology in communication.brings. People tend to spend more time connenting with friends on the internet ranther than going out to visit friends.Maybe it causes the relationship between friends becoming increasily alienated.

In my perspective,Visiting friends and communicating with people face to face is the best way to enhance the friendship.Although the invention of internet and phone make communication become more easily and timely,these tools cannot instead of talking with people in real world. If we want to maitain a true friendship,so we need to go out of home,and visit the people whom you want to keep a good relationship with.Internet and phone are just a tool to convey some information,however it cannot convey your true affection in contrast to talk with people face to face..

saurabh93 11 / 94  
Jan 24, 2012   #2
You have good points. You just need to leave spaces between punctuation and words, thats all. Can you look at my essays if you have the time?
chufan Chou 1 / 2  
Jan 28, 2012   #3
It brings great convenience for us I think is "to us "

You want ideas? Think about situations that would be different if a cell phone was not available to you. I don't think the question requires you to write about "apps" and such (smartphone stuff). So I would maybe give an example or two of a time when a cellphone really made things better (or worse?), say your car broke down- imagine NOT having a cellphone. Remember to show your personality through your writing, this is what the reader really wants. Plus, be original, try not to write about what you imagine others' responses would be.


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