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The island is changed when the tourism construct some tourist facilities


Wiwik Mujahidin 21 / 3 1  
Apr 10, 2016   #1
The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.


The map illustrates that changes that have occured in an island before and after of are many tourist destination facilities. The most noticeable change is the replacement of an areas empty with several major tourism.

To begin, there were several major changes to tourism in the island. An accomodation has been built in the east in an island and it is next to beach. In addition to this, there was a swimming area for visitor in front of the beach. Also, many footpath are alongside the way to go to each of accomodation and beach in the an island.

There have also been changes to the business in the an island. Many restaurant can be seen that in the north of the an island between the accomodation, and a reception has been built in the middle of island between the accomodation, also a pier was constructed on the south of the island is in front of vehiclce tract. Next, there were ships in the south of an island are near from pier.




Anaguna 21 / 27 5  
Apr 10, 2016   #2
Hello wiwik, this is alternative sentence for your introduction paragraph:
The map illustrates that changes that have occured in ...

"The map shows the changes of the island tourism facilities to some extent. The most noticeable change is the replacement of a wide-open area by some accommodation for the visitors. "
nabila05 8 / 12  
Apr 27, 2016   #3
Hi, Wiwik. I would like to share some corrections in your essay.

- The map illustrates thatthe changes that have occurr ed
- of an areas emptythe empty areas
- with several major tourism places
- In addition to this ,
- in front of the beach. Also,, and also
- and beach in the an island.
- in the an island

There you have it Wiwik, I hope you are able to get a few useful modifications in the above remarks.


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