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A job should mean a job for life!



Vns9x 102 / 230  
Oct 6, 2014   #1
A job should mean a job for life. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

A job is the way we earn a living or even the way supporting our future . As analysed above, I completely agree with the statement.

Generally, a job is the thing that everyone wants to have after their graduation, it can be from the university or school and so on. It really depends upon their circumstances. However, all of them have the same objective. It is to create a sustainable career in order to survive in this cruel world. By way of an illustration, I can recall a random guy who is still studying at school since the only way to acquire a proper job is to have proper qualifications.

Moreover, our life cannot go well with everything without money for the reason that we might catch a cold or some hazardous unexpected diseases. And a job is the first and the last way to obtain money to prepare us for the contingency and for the current time simultaneously. Despite this possibility, numerous people attempt to rely on the government's aid or on their insurance. However, it is not the most stable solution for your life anyhow. Since you always have to rely on your own instead of waiting for somebody to help you. To clarify it, imagine yourself being sick and alone. Subsequently you must have an enough amount of money to cure yourself. The money from the government will not be always in time. Sometimes, government will not even support you since you are not the only person on this planet are sick.

By way of a conclusion based on the arguments explored above. I have a strong belief that our job means our job for our life. Because, It plays a huge role in our career. Furthermore, it provides us with precious thing such as money. Which can reinforce us in tremendous challenging situation that might about to happen prematurely.

vangiespen - / 4077  
Oct 6, 2014   #2
A job is the way we earn a living or even the way supporting our future . As analysed above, I completely agree with the statement.

- Vns, what happened to your introduction? This is not the proper introduction format. You need to properly represent the prompt, discussion, and your opinion. This is just a simple statement of fact. There is no room for analysis presented.

Generally, a job is the thing that everyone wants [...] proper job is to have proper qualifications.

- Rather than going into your generalized point of view on the topic, you should first define what a job is. From there, you can move on to a public definition of the same word, before ending with your statement above, which is your definition of a job.

Moreover, our life cannot go well with everything without money [...] you are not the only person on this planet are sick.

- Money is the most common reason for having a job. You need to stop being so generic in your discussion and go into deeper meaning analysis. The very title of this essay tells us that we should analyze the meaning of a job in relation to our lives. So a good discussion would look into the personal reasons that people get a job. Self - Fulfillment, achieving a lifelong goal, or even a social statement are reasons that people take a lifelong job. This is what is meant by "A job should mean a job for life." Some people dedicate their whole lives to their job, even if the pay is negligible. See if you can discuss this from that point of view.

By way of a conclusion based on the arguments [...] situation that might about to happen prematurely.

- Remember the lesson you were taught about conclusions? No new ideas can be presented in that section. So you should just wrap this up. You know how :-)

Fix those portions and we will help you with the grammar errors next :-)
vangiespen - / 4077  
Oct 7, 2014   #3
Vns, you show a thorough understanding of the essay prompt and have managed to use very informative, logical, and analytical pieces of information that have made your essay quite interesting to read, regardless of its grammatical errors and slow start. So, let's see how we can speed things up for you while I also offer some comments to help you further improve your writing style.

In other words, we might obtain prematurely a better job and salary so why we should stick to one job during our entire life?Furthermore, working for something alone specifically can be really boring. As analyzed above , I oppose the statement .

- ... we might prematurely obtain so we should not stick to one job all our lives. ... That is the main reason that I oppose the belief that a job is a lifetime job.

First and foremost, our life is an adventure, Consequently, [...] However, the majority will consider it as the right thing.

- A job cannot be a lifetime job because life is an adventure. Therefore, we have no idea what will happen to us from one moment to the next. One minute you could be flipping burgers at McDonald's then next, you could be sitting behind a desk as a Silicone Valley executive. No single job is sure to have the same person employed in the position for the duration of his life. The adventurous spirit of man will always compel him to seek other adventures and new experiences in other avenues of his life, and that, includes his workplace.

In addition, we all can easily get bored by the same daily [...] set robot is not the solution to firmly obtain happiness .

- You can totally skip this because it is possible to merge the ideas into one paragraph like I did above.

By way of a conclusion based on the arguments explored above.

- While some people may stay in one job all his professional life, others may choose to move from job to job. It is because of the adventurous spirit of man that I believe he will never be tied down to one job all his life.

You really did an excellent job on this essay. You just need to work on developing your sentence structure more. Use my blue highlighted paragraphs as a sample when you practice :-)


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