Junk Food Is Harmful To Teenagers

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Junk food plays an important role in today's world.People of all ages consume a considerable amount of eating junk food.Many people eat junk food regularly and the eat of junk food are increasing especially among teenagers.Some argue that eating junk food are delicious for teenagers while others claim that it harmful teenagers.I personally believe that junk food is harmful to teenagers because it might lead to health problems and make local dishes.

First of all, junk food is harmful to teenagers because it might lead to a variety of health problems.Many teenagers who eat too much junk food when start taking serious weight gain.What is more, teenagers who eat junk food regularly tend to be still.They do not eat a lot of healthy dishes.As a result, they develop problems such as obesity.Therefore, junk food is harmful to teenagers.

Secondly, junk food is harmful to teenagers because it can make us forget about traditional food.People who are constantly out of are always trying to get some junk food.They usually do not eat nice and tasty food at home for those who have eaten outside so they forget the taste of many traditional, regional dishes As a result, junk food has a negative impact on teenagers.

In conclusıon, whether junk food is harmful to teenagers or not is a controversial issue.There are different opinions on this issue.However, I believe that junk food is very harmful to teenagers because it might damage their health and it is being forgotten local food.In order to prevent such problems, ıt is important to limit the teenagers' food.

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You need to explain why junk food has an important role. Example: Junk food help people to fulfill their meal quickly. they help busy people to get their food without waiting to long. You need to tell more the composition of junk food that made it harmful. Maybe you can say that junk food is unhealthy because they made from unknown ingredients and usually contents so much fat because it is fried.

The point is I think you need more scientific base for this essay. for the second paragraph I advise you to see it more from psychology view of point too.

I hope this help you.

Dear, first of all you need to provide the prompt, so we can evaluate your writing properly, to evaluate this we have to know which types of essay you really write.

Anyway i have read your essay, it seem to me unorganized essay. if is it a essay for IELTS task2, then you need to know proper format for this. otherwise you are not able to meet the requirements. my guideline for your this writing is that prompt will be paraphrased so that you can give the idea that you understand what they ask. after that you have to develop bodies with clear topic sentences. finally conclusion with summary.

hope it help you

You need to make good points of reasoning to support your stand in the topic. "Make local dishes" is a vague reasoning and is hard to understand.

Your introduction contains a lot of ideas and I think you could use cohesive devices to link these ideas. What is better is to just paraphrase the prompt given.

Your concluding sentence for paragraph two is just a complete restatement of your topic sentence. Try to summarize it in a different way.

You should also be firm on your stand in the conclusion. There is no need to mention that it is a controversial issue. Be firm to increase your conclusion's strength.

Hope the helps.
PS: I am no expert.