The kind of problem people often face when starting to stay abroad - according to age.

The chart below shows information about the problems people have when they go to live in other countries. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make the comparisons where relevant.

The chart informs about the kind of problem people were often faced when starting to stay abroad according to age. Overall, people having 35-54year-olds had the most problematic challenge. To find a school for their children was the least percentage of the problem for all age range while for people aged 35 to over 55, sorting out healthcare was the first rank of the problem.

The greatest problem for young age was sorting out the money with just below 35 percent. Meanwhile, only 35 percent of 35-54 years old people finding it as a problem while older people had 29 percent of integration problem on this issue. Sorting out healthcare was the trickiest problem with people range 35-54 and over 55 age. The former had 33 percent while the latter had 31 percent of problems. However, for the young age, only 32 percent of people faced the problem.

Finding a school for the children was the problem for people in the middle age and the young with 19 and 6 percent. For elder people, it was the least problem they faced with only two percent of the people.

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Ivan, please allow me to share with you a properly worded version of your essay report for future reference:

The chart provides information about the kinds of problems people face when they move to another country. The problems are presented according to the age of the person who moved away. In a nutshell, the 35-54 year old people face the most problematic challenge. The highest ranked problem for this age group was healthcare. While the least problem for their age was finding a school for their children.

Financial problems represented the greatest problem for the younger generation aged 18-34. The represented 35 % of the money problem. While only 29 % of the 35 - 54 population considered money a problem. On the other hand, the 35-54 age group had healthcare as their biggest and trickiest problem. With only 33 % represented by the age group, this showed that the people over the age of 55 had 31 % of the problems presented to deal with. While the 18 -34 year old people had only 31 % of the problems to resolve. Finally, 29 % of the participants in the survey had a social integration problem.

The least problem for the participants seemed to be finding a school for their children. This was pretty common among the middle aged people. While the 19 year old bracket only represented 6 % of this problem. the oldest people in the group represented only 2 % of the population that faced those surveys.

If you will learn how to collate the information provided into groups that can be discussed fluidly in the report, then you should not have a problem composing the essay anymore.

Hi Ivan.
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THE CHART DISPLAYS INFORMATION ABOUT KINDS OF PROBLEM FACED WHEN PEOPLE WANT TO MOVE TO ANOTHER COUNTRY BASED ON THREE DIFFERENT AGE GROUPS.

- Overall, IT IS IMPORTANT TO NOTE THAT people having 35-54year-olds had HAVE (This is fact information so that you have to use the simple present tense) the most problematic challenge.


(be careful to write meanwhile and while in one sentence. It will make your sentence vague and readers confused. I suggest you only write meanwhile)


I appreciate for your endeavors to use "the former and the Latter". However, you have to be careful to use them because those can make the readers confused. well, you can use them if you only describe two items clearly. I have found that you reviewed 3 figures in the paragraphs so that I am confused about relations. Which groups did relate to the former and latter?. You have to be more aware.


You should make your data more varied. The fraction can be called in this paragraph. HAVE APPROXIMATELY ONE-THIRDS


19 AND 6 PERCENT RESPECTIVELY.


Where is your comparison??. honestly, this is odd paragraph because you did not totally describe the key data. besides that, your paragraph only consists of two sentences. keep in your mind, each good paragraph has at least 3 sentences.

Hopefully, this can help you to enhance your skill.
I really believe you can show better progress if you wanna practice again and again
keep spirit
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