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'knowledge, entertainment, skills' - Watching television by kids may be profitable for them.



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May 7, 2016   #1
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Watching television is bad for children. Use specific detail and examples to support your answer.

Some people believe watching television is bad for children. Nevertheless , I disagree with it because of three crucial of reasons.
First, In processing, It was very comfortable for all users including childrens. Nowadays, Television is one of a good new media for humans life. Which is a nearly of center knowledge that you can watch it at any time and any where. In addition, it has updated a knowledge through a day, So viewers will receive more updating information while they just staying at home.

Secondly, For education and entertainment, It makes wider attitudes of a children knowledges, because it has a variety of a good television programs that they can choose by themselves; For example, News, Advertise, movies, a documentary, game or cartoons, etc. Furthermore, Those programs was classified by age of viewers from stations examination, so we can believe that they were appropriated for all children ages

Last, when children were watching, they were developing theirs other learning skills as well. Not only theirs creation were expanded but they also make a good change of theirs habits. In my experience, when I was studying in elementary level.I remember that my parents have a rules about watching television, which I must already completed my homework before do it, so watching television make a good time management for me. Additionally, It creates an opportunities for family to spend their time together, then they will have a better relationship in household.

In conclusion, Watching television has both of advantage and disadvantages.But If they focus on a good objectives and use it in a right way.Children will receive an advantage more for sure. However, they should have the right to watch it under the advice of theirs parents, who can scan an appropriate programs and prevent some violence show for theirs children.Those make a better quality for all children watching.

justivy03 - / 2265  
May 11, 2016   #2
Hi Kritsada, here's my take on the first two paragraph of your essay.

- Some people believe that watching

- First, Inin processing,
- It wasis ( mind the tenses of your verbs, the tenses affect the overall outcome of your sentence )
- very comfortableaccessible for all users
- t elevision is one of
- a good addition tonew media for humans life. - Which is a nearly ofthe
- center and the source of knowledge
- that you can watch it at any time and any where.
- updated aour knowledge
- through athe day,
- So viewers will receive more updatingupdated
- information while they are just staying at home.

There you have it Kritsada, I hope this corrections help and you will be able to come up with an even stronger revised essay.


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