SAT: We learn more from mistakes than our success - I have experienced it myself in the real life

I 'm trying to write essays to enter private high school and my English is bad. So I'm really thankful for your helps!

TOPIC: We learn ore from our mistakes than our success

MY ESSAY:
We learn more from our mistakes than our success. In my opinion, I totally agree with this saying, because I have experienced it myself in real life. Nobody is perfect enough to success at the first time without making any mistakes. And that's exact how we gain more experience by being able to avoid making the same mistakes again next time.

There is an example I would like to quote here. When I was 8 years old, our teacher always give us a reading mission that due to Friday and there would be a quiz on Friday. Knowing that , I used to delay my reading until the last night. However, one day the teacher removed the quiz day on Thursday. With no wonder, I failed that quiz. After that, I learned to plan things prior and have never delayed anything until the deadline.

Another examples also about me. When I am in 4th grade, I volunteered to plan for a field trip of my class. But back the I have no idea how the leadership work. So I so annoyed of no one listened to my order that even yelled at them. In the end, apparently , I ended up leading a field trip with nothing for my class to eat as lunch. But that terrible trip didn't make me give up. On the contrary, I started to volunteer for more activity since then and gained more and more experience from my mistakes. When I graduated from elementary school, I ,as a final leader, planed a sport season for my whole grade successfully.

In conclusion, I believe we learn more from our mistakes than success. Just like Edison's famous saying:' I have not failed 700 times. I have not failed once. I have succeeded in proving that those 700 ways will not work." The experience we get from making mistakes helps us not to repeat the same mistake. And that's just how we learn new things! And the more experience you have, the further you go on the road to success!

Thanks so much for helping me! I have no experience at all in writhing this kind of essay so I have no idea how to write it. I rewrote the introduction and the conclusion, did what you told me to in 2nd and 3rd paragraph.

INTRODUCTION
Since we are born, we start making mistakes. We figure out why it goes wrong and try to do it again. Some of us give up during this process because they've learned that the results they are approaching is harder to approach than they think, while the others keep correcting their mistakes and trying until they success. Both in these two situation, whether they success or not is just an outcome for what they have learned of the process. Through my own experiences, I have discovered that we learn more from our mistakes than our success.

2ND PARAGRAPH
When I was 8 years old, our teacher always give us a reading mission that due on Friday and there would be a quiz on Friday. Knowing that, I used to delay my reading until the last night. However, one day the teacher removed the quiz day on Thursday. With no wonder, I failed that quiz. After that, I learned to plan things prior and have never delayed anything until the deadline.From making this mistake, I've learned what to do in order to avoid making it again and finally success finding the method not delaying my homework.

3RD PARAGRAPH

CONCLUSION
Success is only a result. Nobody is perfect enough to reach this result at the first time without making any mistakes. In addition, because we all make mistakes and try to figure out why, that is exact how we gain more experience and knowledge. They help us avoid repeating the same mistake in our way to success. Therefore, I believe we learn more from our mistakes than our success.