How the leather goods are produced

The diagram illustrates various steps in the production of leather commodities.

Overall, the step-by-step process requires a total of eleven stages, beginning with drying animal skin and ending with the final product.

At the beginning of the process, animal hides are dried before being transferred to a factory in order to be washed by a mixture including water and lime. After that, the hides are passed onto a tank of lime water where they are soaked. In the next phase, the treated ones enter the period of stretching by a flattening machine.

The process continue with these leathers are immersed into the tannin substances followed by the polishing of the ingredients. Subsequently, leathers are loaded onto a truck to be delivered to the factory where they play a vital role in assembling different kinds of leather items such as shoes, bags and balls.

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