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O level essay: School uniform- sense of identity and good discipline



Chim Can Cook 10 / 23  
Jan 23, 2011   #1
Topic: It is said that school uniform gives pupils a sense of identity and encourages good discipline. Do you agree?

"Uniform is boring!", "Uniform is unnecessary!"," School can still do well without uniform!". Those complaints about school uniform have become a familiar refrain. Even so, fully scrutinizing the scope of the problem, we can see that the benefits of the uniform actually outweigh its minor inconvenience. To tell the truth, uniform does more than just making students look alike. But in what ways? The following reasons will ascertain the doubts.

First of all, uniform inculcate a sense of identity in students by developing the ambassadorship. Wearing the uniform, students are representatives of the school's image. By looking at the uniform, people will be able to know what school one is from, hence, somehow judge the school through one's demeanor. Furthermore, in uniform, everyone is equal, thus, students will respect one another and regard each individual as a valued member of the school. In any occasion of inter-school competitions, uniform distinguish students of one school from another. As a result, school unity and team spirit are preserved.

Secondly, strong discipline is also enforced on account of uniform. Owing to increasing peer pressure, students nowadays are likely to assess each other by clothes and appearances. In general, nerds, who are made fun of their look, feel embarrassed and discouraged in school, which results in decline of their academic performances. Hence, uniform helps to decrease bully and tease. Moreover, as students learn to respect each other, rules and regulations are tightened. To add on, uniform frees students from morning hassle of rummaging their wardrobes looking for clothes, which somehow contribute to their punctuality.

On the other hand, objectors of school uniform argue that uniform kills creativity and individuality as students are not able to express themselves. As they have to wear the same outfits every weekday, they do not have to make a choice on their clothes. Thus, they have no opportunities to manifest their artistic fashion tastes and styles. However, school is not a fashion show but an education institution. Is there a need to express one's self in the school while the main purpose of education is to prepare one with knowledge and skills for future career? In addition, creativity is not killed but encouraged. Fashion is not the only way to develop it. In fact, during activities in math and science classes, their inventiveness and imagination are further facilitated. On top of that, since students stop judge other's by clothes, they tend to be more open and make friends with different personalities. Therefore, the materialism can somehow be minimized. Students will learn to appreciate the real spiritual values, which is essentially in our modern society where standard of morality seems to be dropping.

Summing up, uniform should be implemented in school as it imparts loyalty to the school in students as well as put them on their best behavior.

This is one of my assignments. Actually, I have read some of the essays on the forum for some referrence. The idea of "School is not a fashion show" engaged me a lot, so I include it in.

Please make correction and leave your comments. Thanks:P

tas 1 / 3  
Jan 23, 2011   #2
a well rounded essay! u seemed to have covered all the points. However the duration for essays are very short in o levels. i hope u r timing urself! best of luck.
EF_Susan - / 2310  
Jan 29, 2011   #3
You have to pluralize Uniform:

"Uniforms are boring!" "Uniforms are unnecessary!" "School can still do well without uniforms!" Those complaints about school uniforms have become a familiar refrain.---Now it is perfect! Notice that I took out those periods. If you have the exclamation mark, do not use a period.

To tell the truth, uniforms do does more than just making students look alike. But in what ways? The following reasons will ascertain the doubts.

Owing to increasing peer pressure, students nowadays are likely to assess each other by clothes and appearances. ---This is a very good sentence.

Your essay has excellent structure, because each paragraph is about one main idea. Very good organization!

In general, nerds, who are made fun of their the way they look, feel embarrassed and discouraged in school, which results in decline of their academic performances.---another great sentence!!

Hence, uniforms help to ...

Summing up, uniforms should be implemented in school as it they impart loyal ty to the school in students as well as put them on their best behavior.


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