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The life in Perth


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Apr 6, 2012   #1
I have lived in Perth since I arrived.
I have studied English at the Curtin University for two weeks .And I`ve visited Perth city centre and Cannington.
I went to Perth for visa renewal, and I have seen the high buildings and a lot of people, cars, and the new roads at organized and quick traffic. I liked everything at Perth, and I would like visit it many times.

About Cannington, I go to it every day, sometimes for shopping, but it is very tranquil.
I would like visit a lot of places in Perth, such sea, parks, and clubs.
EF_Susan - / 2,364 12  
Apr 9, 2012   #2
I have lived in Perth since I arrived.
I have studied English at the Curtin University for two weeks .And I`ve visited Perth city centre and Cannington.
I went to Perth for visa renewal, and I have seen the high buildings and a lot of people. (end sentence) [s]cars, and theI was fascinated by the new roadsatwith all of the organized and quick traffic. I liked everything at Perth, and I would like visit it many times.

About Cannington, I go to it every day, sometimes for shopping, but it is very tranquil.
I would like visit a lot of places in Perth, such sea, parks, and clubs.

Hello! I don't know how long this project is supposed to be but either way I am advising you to elaborate quite a bit. If you haven't been in Perth long enough to know all there is about it, you could add to what you do know about it and would like to do. For example, you could talk about the specifics of where you want to travel within the area. Also, some sensory information (such as the smells, the sounds, tastes, feelings etc) would help round out this work a bit better.

I hope that helps :) .


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