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'I like football and music' - ESSAY on my HOBBIES



tiennguyen 1 / 3  
Jun 26, 2014   #1
Can you please read my essay and make corrections to it? Also, can you tell me if I need to add some more stuff or take something out? This is my last hope and I really need to get this done.

Today, I will write about interest of mine. I very like football, and listen music. I always listen music online, because I usually online working on my computer. I like eat meat, fish and drink coffee. I like stuffing the Internet, and written blog, it about technical.

Do you like football?, if you like football, what is name team your like? And a player you like, name of player your like. If you don't like football, why? Please, explain.

I think, if I stress, I will sing a karaoke with my friend, in living very much stress, sometimes it make your tired. It will make always tired. Sometime I distraction, because I surfing the Internet, access Facebook and youtube. I interest read electronic newspapers because it very much or rich information, and I don't much money buy paper. I always wake up later, that is reason by last night I go to bed at midnight at 3 a.m, I don't remember an hour exactly, but it is in the range that 3-4h a.m.

Follow you, Are they should go to bed late? you can talk when you go to bed.
Final, I'm pause at here. I promise next topic I will write best.
Good bye and see you again next day.

dumi 1 / 6793  
Jun 26, 2014   #2
Today, I will write about the interests of mine. I very like football very much(no comma) and also listening to music. I always listen to music online, because I usually online working on my computeram doing an online job. I like eating meat, fish and drinking coffee. I like stuffingsurfing on the Internet, and writtenwriting blogs on technical subjects., it about technical.
OP tiennguyen 1 / 3  
Jun 26, 2014   #3
Thank you very much Dumi.
FellowWriter 1 / 1  
Jun 26, 2014   #4
Do you like football?, if you like football, what is name team your like? And a player you like, name of player your like. If you don't like football, why? Please, explain.

I think, if I stress, I will sing a karaoke with my friend, in living very much stress, sometimes it make your tired. It will make always tired. Sometime I distraction, because I surfing the Internet, access Facebook and youtube. I interest read electronic newspapers because it very much or rich information, and I don't much money buy paper. I always wake up later, that is reason by last night I go to bed at midnight at 3 a.m, I don't remember an hour exactly, but it is in the range that 3-4h a.m.

Follow you, Are they should go to bed late? you can talk when you go to bed.
Final, I'm pause at here. I promise next topic I will write best.
Good bye and see you again next day.

Do you like football? If you do, what's the name of your favourite team? How about the name of a player you like? If you don't like football, do you care to expain why? If I am stressed out, I sing a karaoke with my friend, who is also very much stressed usually. Sometimes it makes us very tired. Actually, it always does. Sometimes, I distract myself by surfing the internet and going on sites such as Youtube and Facebook. I take great interest in reading online newspapers because it contains as much information as paper ones and I can't afford to buy those. I always wake up late, so I naturally fall asleep late too. For example, last night I went to bed around 3 a.m. I don't remember the exact time, but it was around 3 to 4 a.m. ______________________________ (I couldn't understand this sentence!)

I'll stop here. I promise to write my best on the next topic again.
Good by and see you again next day.

I fixed some errors and improved some sentences. Hope I helped.
OP tiennguyen 1 / 3  
Jun 26, 2014   #5
Thank you very much FellowWriter. Idea great.


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