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The line graph depicts the proportion of people in the UK who went to the movies once a month


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Jun 20, 2022   #1

the percentage of people in the different age group who went to the cinema



From 1984 to 2000, the line graph depicts the proportion of people in the UK who went to the movies once a month, divided into four age groups.

While attendance at the movies climbed considerably in all four age groups, 15-to-24-year-olds were the most frequent moviegoers over the time period studied.

In 1984, around 18 percent of people aged 15 to 24 went to the movies once a month, the highest percentage of all age groups. The 7-14 age group and the 25-35 age group come in second and third, with 10% and 4% of the vote, respectively. Meanwhile, nearly no one over the age of 35 went to the movies. Over the next 16 years, the rate of attendance for all age groups progressively increased.

By 2000, the proportion of those aged 15 to 24 had increased thrice, reaching a peak of about 60%, more than double the proportions for those aged 7 to 14 and those aged 25 to 35. The cinema, on the other hand, drew roughly 15% of moviegoers aged 35 and up at the conclusion of the era.



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Jun 20, 2022   #2
Be careful with the use of tenses in the report. remember that the reference years have already passed. Therefore the use of present or current references will create grammar range deductions. Grammar scores are given based upon the obvious knowledge of the exam taker when it comes to sentence structure. This is reflectedin his ability to write grammatically correct sentences.

A summary overview is considered incomplete when it does not include a listing rundown. In this case the 4 age group should be mentioned to create cohesiveness when the same is mentioned in the trending paragraph. The overview should contain at least 3 sentences. All paragraphs need to have 3 sentences at least. A 2 sentence presentation is not a complete paragraph. The examiner shall consider the paragraph under analyzed and under developed. It will not be considered coherent and cohesive enough for scoring.


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